《Astral Reviews Vol. 2》Review 26- Letters to the Moon
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Theme (13/15)
You accomplished getting an emotional response out of me. I was able to feel something as I read your writing. This is extremely important to poetry. I can always see that your telling a story even in the short ones. There are a few I didn't quite fully connect with but overall I saw a lot of good potentials. The darker theme of the poetry connected with me in some ways so I empathized.
Cover (8/10)
I like the cover but reduce the size of the awards you got. The core focus should always be on the cover and not the badges you have won on it. Although the cover draws me in, I get distracted looking at the two big badges. The aesthetic is thrown off slightly by them being there is what I'm trying to get at.
Title (10/10)
I really like the creative title. I haven't heard anything quite like it and when I first saw your application, I was drawn to the name. It's a name that I would look at in a library and pick up to read. I don't see how this can be approved in any way or how it would be missing anything. In poetry, the title isn't necessarily the same as what the words may be about because it could represent something figuratively.
Detail (13/15)
The attention to detail is great and I am imeresed in your world of poetry for some of your readings. Some of the poems as I said I didn't fully connect with or see the appeal but I recognize the effort. Poetry is hard to write and you have to use emotion as the most effective tool.
Originality (9/10)
I see a lot of original ideas but also some show ideas that have already been discussed. You mention a similar subject but for some, you don't create a new idea or way to present them that has different from others who were in your predicament.
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Writing Skills (14/15)
I would first like to suggest the use of more figurative language. You want to invoke the senses to better connect with people's emotions and how they feel. Your stanza construction is done well and I can see good diction.
Grammar (10/10)
I didn't see any problem with the grammar overall from everything that I read. Everything looks good to me.
Overall Poetry(14/15)
Overall I liked poetry and it was a pleasant surprise to read. I was interested in reading most of the poems and it was a review I didn't mind doing all that much. it was an interesting read that I would recommend to others.
Overall Score: 91 (A)
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