Plot (8/10)

The plot is exactly what I thought it would be and that isn't good. Although you can say as you wish in your synopsis, I shouldn't be able to fully guess whats going to happen next. Add some twists that can add more to your plot and how it develops. You want your plot to not only to not replicate something from before but present a new interesting idea.

Grammar (10/10)

I noticed no major issues with grammar. It all looks good to me overall.

Characters (9/10)

I see almost everything I need for the perfect dynamic characters. You bring your characters to life but it feels as if something is missing. Just one thing will make all the character seems perfectly in place.

Cover (7/10)

The cover is pretty interesting to look at. I was intrigued to see what it was about. Considering the name and what I was thinking about, your book wasn't what I thought it was. Your cover and story give me two different vibes in my opinion. I do not feel they are connected to one another as well oiled machine.

Title (8/10)

I will say the title is interesting but I don't fully feel it fits the story. I can see the appeal of the name but don't see how it fits the best. When there is a unique title for a story that can be replicated or made better, it not only feels right but it isn't an argument with any opinions.

Detail (8/10)

The detail is great but at times the setting is fully described. I would say to work on that so the sense of sight is enhanced more. Also, don't be afraid to add more figurative to the parts you descibe well. It adds another dimension to the description.

Originality (7/10)

I've seen a very similar idea to what you have going on here. It isn't really all that different from other books that I have read along the same lines as this one. It is extremely predictable.

Prologue/ Introduction(10/10)

Well, you actually had a prologue and it was pretty interesting. You didn't give away too much information but you gave enough to get a reader interested. A reader should be able to identify

Writing Skills (9/10)

The writing skills are very great for most of the story. I would focus most on diction in each chapter. That would help enhance your writing the most along with syntax and of course my mentioning of figurative language above.

Overall story(8/10)

All though there is a lot of great ideas mixed it, I felt I could predict what was going to happen. The more I see this in a book, the less I want to read it. When a reader looks at your book, they shouldn't know the turn it will take.

Overall Score: 84 (B)

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