《Checkpoint》Rewrite
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Hello all,
I believe that the best course of action will be to rewrite this book. The plot is a mess and the character is kind of just way too knowledgeable on everything. I also think that the combat is too clunky and can use a revamp. Furthermore, i want to get rid of the author comments throughout the entirity of the story.
So for the sake of everything, this novel will be rewritten in the background as i try to write a different story in the meantime.
Cheers and thanks,
-cromsler, master of being inconsistent
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