《Critique And Editing Info》Critique: Falling to Pieces
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Falling to Pieces
ih9344
Short Story, social anxiety, No-Fiction?, Commentary
I really like the use of puzzle pieces and the color being black and white.
Good; sweet and simple. States the problem and how she might be able to solve the problem. I really like how you tied the dialogue and the summary into one.
Good. It really didn't hook me, but it's a good start. You describe everything and nothing is missing.
What do you mean editing! This chapter is perfect! Grammar/ punctuation, even sentence flow is good. I do feel it should be a little longer, but I understand why it's not because this is a short story.
(I needed a little more; I felt like I haven't read your full potential. So Part 1 is a freebie)
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OMG Your my first critique I've ever given a 5. Everything is perfect. Everytging is pretty much stated above. I actually might read on (if I find the time 😭) Keep Writing
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1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2:Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4:Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
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