《Critique And Editing Info》Critique: The King and The War Dancer
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The King and The War Dancer
TONYANN
Fantasy, Erotic, Romance, Short Story
Sets what type of dancer she is. Love the change of front.
Sweet and straight to the point.
OMG the dancing I can imagine her dancing. The slow change of thinking she's performing for a crowd and then to only be dancing in front of one man.
One word.. Oh Snap...This King is one Badass
OMG
Woah
SHIP IT!!
Oh Snap..Brother
Coward move, but needed to be done
My heart!
4.5 💙💙💙💙
Amazing word choice. OMG as you can tell above, I read this whole short story. I couldn't stop reading it. I was a little bit confused about her born curse. You might need to explain that differently or it could just be me. Some words misspelled, just read through it.
Rate from 1-5
💙💙💙💙💙
1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2:Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4:Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
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