《Critique And Editing Info》Critique: Dracula's Tempestuous Bride
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Dracula's Tempestuous Bride
SassyRoe
Paranormal, Vampire, Forbidden Romance, Fantasy, Elf
LOVE IT. Sweet and Simple. Love how the only color is Red.
States the topic and problem for the characters
The gif boy. "It's my baby" Best line ever!
Well there goes Toby.. Thanks I was starting to like him...
Haha.. that must have hurt...
AWWWWWWWW!!! MY HEART!!
5 💙💙💙💙 💙
I don't even know where to start!! This is soooo GOOD and it's only the Second Chapter!!! I'm not very big on Vampires, but Count Dracula, that's a different story. When I have time I'll definitely read on. Keep up the good work!!
Rate from 1-5
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1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2:Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4:Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
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