《Critique And Editing Info》Critique: Dracula's Tempestuous Bride
Advertisement
Dracula's Tempestuous Bride
SassyRoe
Paranormal, Vampire, Forbidden Romance, Fantasy, Elf
LOVE IT. Sweet and Simple. Love how the only color is Red.
States the topic and problem for the characters
The gif boy. "It's my baby" Best line ever!
Well there goes Toby.. Thanks I was starting to like him...
Haha.. that must have hurt...
AWWWWWWWW!!! MY HEART!!
5 💙💙💙💙 💙
I don't even know where to start!! This is soooo GOOD and it's only the Second Chapter!!! I'm not very big on Vampires, but Count Dracula, that's a different story. When I have time I'll definitely read on. Keep up the good work!!
Rate from 1-5
💙💙💙💙💙
1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2:Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4:Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
Advertisement
- In Serial1333 Chapters
Spare Me, Great Lord!
Visit translator siteThis is the story of an orphan, Lu Shu. He is not any regular orphan, but a metahuman experiencing the changes in himself, his country and the world during the dawn of the magical era. Watch as Lu Shu embarks on a journey to hone his peculiar abilities together with his sister, the adorable and charismatic Lu Xiaoyu. Along the way, they’ll encounter supernatural events, obstacles and even the most powerful people in their country. How will Lu Shu make the best of his abilities and oust his never-ending list of rivals and opponents?
8 456 - In Serial20 Chapters
Equilibrium
Peter V. Kastell is taken from the cycle of reincarnation and given a purpose. His purpose can be fulfilled in nearly any way he chooses. BUT His soul is damaged. And because of that, he will be disadvantaged in an unforeseen way.Thanks to a benevolent Goddess he will gain different advantages to compensate. Along the way, his story will be uncovered, and he will gain powers beyond what he ever thought possible.A unique Lit-RPG series. Is mana really all that important anyway??? Currently on hiatus until further notice. A very special thank you to: Spoiler: my Top Donators on PayPal! |Wesley R.| |Braeden R.| |Caleb W.| |Christopher J.| Spoiler: my monthly Patrons on Patreon! |Braeden| |David J. R.| |Newguy Roy| |Fjopt| This work is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-NonCommercial-NoDerivatives 4.0 International License.
8 198 - In Serial14 Chapters
NiceOneNoMicroSon
Bobby was a normal child - until his parents decided to improve his future chances with bleeding edge technology.
8 170 - In Serial26 Chapters
Noctoseismology
Doctor Roxanne Updyke was isekai'd earlier today. She finds herself in a world of noble heroes and wicked villains, wielding great powers against each other in the never-ending war for justice. An ordinary person would be advised to run for cover. Doctor Roxanne Updyke, however, is a mad scientist and an experienced bounty hunter, from a world of powers more subtle but no less dangerous. The greatest danger isn't the fights between heroes and villains, it's that she'll find something she's unwilling to leave behind when her job is done.
8 112 - In Serial31 Chapters
Being Frank
**Author's Note** This was my 7th attempt at writing this story. I've worked on the story since 20 years ago but my writing style and skills haven't been satisfactory to me. So after working as a digital content manager for 2 years and after a very long deliberation I've decided to drop this 7th attempt and start on my 8th attempt. This 8th attempt will be the same story but starting from a different point in the timeline of my story. Thank you for your support on this 7th try, it is only due to your reviews and comments that I have the confidence to work hard on my 8th attempt. I started on my 8th attempt with the intention that my 8th attempt will be the final one as I'm a lot more confident and content with my where my writing skills are currently at. Volume 1 In a world filled with magic, war, giants and other awesome races lives Frank. Who being Frank is somewhat of a hermit. He loves to tinker with various contraptions trying to bend the laws of magic to his will. Through his successes he has garnered some attention; unwanted attention. If only that was all there was to it. .... war is coming Volume 2 Frank was born as a normal child, born in a normal family. His father was a scientist and was busy working most days. This is also why Frank was especially excited when his father decided to take an extended holiday to travel to Asia with his family. But their trip turns out to be one from which there is no going back. Writer's notice: I will continue to participate in the NaNoWriMo every November till I finish all that I have planned to write. I expect to have this story finished in 14 years approximately.Update:I was unhappy with how I had first written the first and second volume but am leaving the editing and finishing of those volumes till later and have started on the third one. The chronological order so far is 2-1-3. Might fix that too later.
8 122 - In Serial37 Chapters
orphic [1] ⇻ stiles stilinski
"Stop pining over him Elle, you can do better.""I don't want better Lyds, I'm not sure it's even possible. I want him." [ based off Teen Wolf, Season One. ]
8 69
Prev Chap
Next Chap
Chap List
Boy
Girl
