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MusicStoryLover05

Teen Fiction, Adventure, Life

LOVE IT. Cute and straight to the point!

Sweet and straight to the point. States the topic and conflict.

Establishes the main character and her friends are close and are in High School together. We see her character and interaction with other people.

Be careful with present and past tense. Needs a little bit of spell check.

I like how this story is going. It's what I would call a sweet and fluffy read. There is no major problem and you don't have to think. I do have one question... Did she really eat the puppy Chow??

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Keep writing, it's just in it's first stages. I might read on, but I have a hard time reading Complementary books.

Rate from 1-5

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1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing

2:Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice

3: Good/Needs a little editing

4:Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on

5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on