《Critique And Editing Info》Critique: Fear - Scott Mcall
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Fear - Scott Mcall
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Fan Fiction, Supernatural
GORGEOUS!!! I love the misty gray background!!! 😍😍😍
Not very informal, but I do like the quote. You state there is something Supernatural and there are hunters.
At first I wasn't sure. I was really confused that the character was typing a blog. Until she stated it. There are some little parts that need to be re read (Sentence flow). The introducing of Sam and Dean was good. Since I've watched Supernatural since day one I understand a lot. I suggest find someone who has never watched Supernatural and see how the story goes for them. I do suggest the introduction of Cas, which is the first time the main character meets him, should be WAY more DRAMATIC! There are some minor things that can be taken out, in which can distract the reader.
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I LOVE Teen Wolf and Supernatural so I might read on.
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1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2:Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4:Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
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