《Astral Reviews Vol. 2》Review 23- The Divinities of Navalok
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Plot (10/10)
I really like to plot and what you have done with it. You have a unique plot for a wide array of audiences to view. It was good to see a unique idea in play.
Grammar (9/10)
There is a few minor errors here and there that I noticed but they are more errors I see untentionally. They don't still out much but I'm extremely sensitive to these kinds of things. I would just say through them through a system for missing punctuation.
Characters (10/10)
I see everything you need to have great chacters. I not only understand them but I see thier growth. They aren't just characters in a book but real people that you have brought to life. You have made dynamic characters for all to see.
Cover (9/10)
I like the cover overall. I would only suggest reducing the size of the badges you have. Your cover is amazing and you shouldn't let the awards you got take away from the main source of attention. The format is well done other than that.
Title (10/10)
For one, I can say nobody has the same title as you. Although you are using a mythology of a specific religion, I have yet to see many stories use Hindu mythology as a basis. It adds a new fresh flavor to the pot.
Detail (10/10)
The attention to detail is impeccable. I was able to feel the setting as if I was there. You invoke my senses with figurative language which is extremley important in the story's growth.
Originality (10/10)
I can honestly say although there is ideas of other stories at play, you have made something completely new. There is unique ideas that I haven't seen before and I looked forward to reading them. I was glad to see your story wasn't a generic one where everything was exactly guessed correctly.
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Prologue/ Introduction(10/10)
There was a strong entrance into the book and it was done correctly. As a prologue or first chapter should encourage the reader to read more, you did that. I was able to continue reading and want to see more as it went on.
Writing Skills (10/10)
I can see the attention you payed to your writing. I see the sentence construction and diction is done very well. I can also say that your word choice for specific things is done well. The writing skills are amazing and if you can, add more figurative language. You want to have as much as you can because it brings the story to life more.
Overall story(10/10)
Sometimes when people introduce thier culture into a book, it doesn't quite turn out well. It's even worse when people write about other cultures and end up getting things wrong. The way you displayed everything in your writing was impeccable. I even looked up things so I could give the best possible review. I really liked the story overall.
Overall Score: 98 (A)
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