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I'm writing this in regards to the weak MC. As you all know, my MC is somewhat lacking in the maturity department. As of right now, I cannot handle the amount of complaints that was directed at my MC, so in order to satisfy all your wishes, I would like all of you to answer a few questions. If that is okay with you then proceed on to the questions below.
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What is wrong with the MC?
In which point of the story did the MC irritate you the most?
What could've been done differently about that situation? Instead how of the way the MC reacted, what would have been a better reaction?
Finally, How do you think the MC should be like, instead how he currently is? (Remember this is just how you picture my MC should've been. It will be my decision to take some of your ideas and incorporate it into the MC.)
Please try to answer these questions truthfully and with as much detail as possible. Also try to answer all of them, because I'm going to use these feedbacks to possibly rewrite/change the MC. THIS IS NOT A COMPLAINING POST. Therefore, unless you are here to actually give feedback, do not post random babble. Anything I deem unnecessary will be removed. Also if you have no issues with the MC, don't bother answering the questions, since it won't help me at all if you say: "Hiro is perfect the way he is.".
Part of me feels like giving up, it's painful to be honest. I read and try to reply to any comments that I can, to see posts that only point out what I did wrong and not give advice pains me. At times I even wanted to remove some of then, of course this has never happened, because I want to be honest with my readers. Therefore this is a serious post regarding the MC. If there is anything else that you find problematic, feel free to point it out, however you must give the feedback questions priority.
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