《Du Fyrn Vanyali》Feedback
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I'm writing this in regards to the weak MC. As you all know, my MC is somewhat lacking in the maturity department. As of right now, I cannot handle the amount of complaints that was directed at my MC, so in order to satisfy all your wishes, I would like all of you to answer a few questions. If that is okay with you then proceed on to the questions below.
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What is wrong with the MC?
In which point of the story did the MC irritate you the most?
What could've been done differently about that situation? Instead how of the way the MC reacted, what would have been a better reaction?
Finally, How do you think the MC should be like, instead how he currently is? (Remember this is just how you picture my MC should've been. It will be my decision to take some of your ideas and incorporate it into the MC.)
Please try to answer these questions truthfully and with as much detail as possible. Also try to answer all of them, because I'm going to use these feedbacks to possibly rewrite/change the MC. THIS IS NOT A COMPLAINING POST. Therefore, unless you are here to actually give feedback, do not post random babble. Anything I deem unnecessary will be removed. Also if you have no issues with the MC, don't bother answering the questions, since it won't help me at all if you say: "Hiro is perfect the way he is.".
Part of me feels like giving up, it's painful to be honest. I read and try to reply to any comments that I can, to see posts that only point out what I did wrong and not give advice pains me. At times I even wanted to remove some of then, of course this has never happened, because I want to be honest with my readers. Therefore this is a serious post regarding the MC. If there is anything else that you find problematic, feel free to point it out, however you must give the feedback questions priority.
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I love to write and if RoyalRoadL doesn't want me here, I won't post anymore. I will continue to write my stories, I just won't show them to the public.
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Creator of All-Realms
Release Schedule: 5 chapters/week, from Monday to Friday (01:15 PM, GMT-3) Throughout the years, countless powerful beings rose and fell. As powerful as they were, their lifespan had an end. The universe is fair. Beings whose power was enough to shatter planets in countless pieces wailed in the cosmos, feeling that while the universe being fair was a blessing, it was also a curse! They trained for thousands, even tens of thousands of years to reach their current strength, but just like mortals, their lifespan also had an end! Countless galaxies away, within Earth, a young man shook his head before looking at the moon worriedly, ''What's the use knowing this... I must deal with my problems, right? Sometimes, knowing everything isn't that useful...'' He, who can see everything, do everything and be everything, was troubled. The universe is fair. That's the only thing most living beings agreed, not expecting unfairness to appear. Diverting his gaze from the moon, the young man looked towards his farm with calm eyes, ''Well, well. I wonder what surprises you'll bring me, my creations...'' This is a story about a lazy creator trying to deal with his problems while getting to know himself better.
8 119Personal Agency
It is better to die knowing. Listen. The world as you know it is not as you know it. It is a construction, a facade, a mural painted over the world to hide the fact that it is very broken on some fundamental levels. That there exists an entire spiritual realm, one of cognition and perception and memory and that it teems with awful life. The world was not made for us. Jacob Irwing is a fairly normal 26 year old American man. He's an amateur photographer, unmarried and does not work in his chosen field. He is also dying, right now, in the first chapter of this story. Someone has put a bullet in him. Agent Z is a fairly abnormal woman of no nationality. Her age is classified. Her name is classified. Her background? You better believe it's classified. She works for the people who hide the truth. She is going to wake up with a hole in her head in the first chapter of this story, surrounded by corpses and also by a dying fairly normal 26 year old American man. Burned and seemingly abandoned by the Agency, Agent Z has lost her memory, her security clearance and her authorisation. All that she's gained is Jacob, who is thoroughly in this shit now. Together they must work to uncover the truth, if any such thing even exists, in this erratic urban fantasy weird-fic. Updates every Monday, Wednesday and Friday. Australian time.
8 209Gods, Monsters, and a Fuzzy-tail
Magic is life, and Magic to spare is power. Everyone has Magic to spare, except Eli Wisp, who has just enough to stay alive. Despite this, he dreams of becoming the first of the premier Magic users. He wants to be a Maestro. When an old enemy of the world's greatest hero—with the power to destroy everything Eli knows—threatens to return, he must prove that he's not all talk. Join him in an epic quest where he meets new friends, old heroes, and evil's like no other on his path to becoming the best.
8 83DARK
Някой смятат, че в човешката природа е да надграждат, да се адаптират, създават и отглеждат, но колкото по-дълго населяват земята, губят положителните си черти. Оставят само разруха след себе си и унищожават, всичко, до което се докоснат, включително и самите себе си. Планетата умира, а земята е пренаселена. Настъпва хаос и се разпространява зараза, която изменя гените на хората. Не е известно, кога се появява, как се разпространява или симптомите. Единственото ясно е, че обикновено засегнатите са с умствени проблеми или преживели нещо тежко в миналото си. Хора, позволили на света, който са създали да ги промени и корумпира сърцата им. Няма имунизирани, а единствения начин, да се спасиш, е да успееш да запазиш сърцето си чисто, което е невъзможно да се случи, когато си в центъра на световна война. Заразените го наричат еволюция, а незаразените го определят, като прочистване и решение на проблема с пренаселването на планетата. Във всеки случай, и двете страни са решени да елиминират другата. Земята умира, всичко бива унищожено, а хората най-сетне получават, това което винаги са искали-само
8 195Body Language.
The body never lies...
8 80Villain rehab
Deku,bakugou and todoroki are villains in rehab and they hate hero's especially all night and endeavour but one of their childhood friends is in the hero course, will she convince them to become hero's? Or will the convince her to become a villain?
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