Wow mixed review much? Anyway, I will probably be doing BOTH of these at the same time, I was just wondering where to take the other one, (and a few comments pointing out what I did wrong came up, for example that he wasn't guarded)

Anyway, I have (actually) about 3 chapters of the other one saved up. I think I will break this one off and post it as its own story (A different rendition maybe? I just dont have a decent description for it yet...)

Anyway, the pole is for priority on one story or the other... (Of course, I will probably not pay attention to it, and just write when I want to write, but it might possibly have maybe probably some partial effect on how I manage my time... maybe?)

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The circle stopped glowing as the ceremony completed.

The king looked at the new arrivals, trying to judge their worth, but found that he was unable to at the moment.

He looked at the dozen or so arrivals, overjoyed at their large number, as the ancient records stated that most likely the groups would be under 5 people.

The group seemed to be all young adults except for one man. They were a mix of both genders, and had similar features between them all, the same skin color and similar hair colors. His curious gaze fell upon one exception. A yellow haired person, who appeared to be frantically searching the room. She was beautiful, even more so then his daughter, who was heralded as the best in the nobility. He glanced around, seeing the lecherous and lust filled gazes that the nobles were giving her. He knew that he would have to shield her from them, or risk losing the cooperation of the rest of the group. He took a hand to rub his temple at the trouble she would bring.

Herald : "Welcome Heroes, Yo-"

Blonde Girl : "YOU FUCKING PIECE OF SHIT!!!" At those words, most of the room was stunned, but even they could not predict what happened next. She ran over to the only adult from the group, and grabbed his shirt, then proceeded to throw him on the ground. She appeared to be extremely furious.

Veronica : "I WAS THIS FUCKING CLOSE!!! YOU JUST HAD TO PUSH US APART AS THE SPATIAL DISTORTION FORMED DIDN'T YOU!?!?!?!"

The man seemed baffled, at both her extreme turn in attitude and the turn of events.

The king motioned to a guard, to go restrain the girl before something happened. The guard nodded in response, and went behind her.

When she noticed the guard approaching her, her eyes went wide with anger and rage. She flicked her hand in his general direction, and everyone in the room watched, wide eyed, as the knight flew backwards thirty some-odd feet, before crashing into a table.

The girl seemed to come back to her senses, a massive scowl on her face, as she turned to the King.

Veronica : "You...You have just made a BIG mistake Mr..."

The mages, who had preformed the ceremony had started to put up shields around the nobles and the king, trying to protect them from the rampaging girl, due to the unexpected course of events. They had never expected a hero to be so... unreasonable... after the summon, so they had neglected to set up any countermeasures beforehand.

The girl reached into a small pouch she was carrying, and produced a small silvery metallic object. She pointed it at the king, and spoke again.

Veronica : "What is going on?"

The herald started to speak, causing her to redirect her fury towards him.

Herald :""I am sure that you must be surprised at this sudden event in your life, but please, do not be alarmed! We have summoned you into our world! You have the opportunity to become the strongest people on our planet! To slay great beasts! To destroy entire armies with your might! Of course, all of this will happen in due time, for now please calm down and listen to our tale of sorrow and grief..."

Veronica : "Tell me, there should be more of us... where are they?"

The king was baffled at the turn of events. He had no idea what she was talking about. They had only summoned these people, no one else had showed up. This was their first attempt as well.

Herald : "Please hero, be calm. I am sure their must be some sort of misunderstanding..."

He did know one thing however, this girl, she was not normal.

King :*Could she be???*

One of the other heroes walked up to her, attempting to calm her down.

Boy : "Chill Veronica, chilll.... Its kind of obvious that he isn't in the room right? Perhaps he wasn't summoned?"

Veronica looked at the boy, slightly lowering her weapon, but then shook her head.

Veronica : "That doesn't explain anything. This was targeted on him..."

Boy : "Targeted on who?? Veronica, you aren't making any sense?? Where did you get that thing?? Perhaps you should just put it down, and let them explain what is going on... Right?"

She glanced at the room. It appeared they weren't taking her seriously.

She then looked at the king, and at those around her. She flicked a switch on the metallic device, causing it to produce a high humming sound. The ears of everyone in the room pricked up at that sound. It was... unnatural. Something out of place in this medieval castle.

One of the warriors next to the king bent down

Veronica : "Tell me, how do incompetent bafoons like you humans, come into contact with Maximar technology? Where did you get this? Why was this allowed by the Stratovian council!?! And above all.... WHERE IS MY FUCKING HUSBAND!?!?"

At her words, various murmurs sounded from the assembled people.

The king had caught the word. The word which should only refer to living gods. The ones who settled in their sky cities and watched over them. That weapon, it looked different then most. It appeared harmless to him, but the way she was wielding it, she acted like it was a powerful weapon.

King : *Is this a bluff? Or is that a powerful weapon of their world?*

The king motioned to more guards, ordering them and the mages to surround her, and take the weapon away from her.

King : "And why should I listen to a girl? You probably haven't even known a man yet? Who is this husband of which you speak?"

Veronica : "YOU DARE!?!!? I ought to roast you where you stand..."

She went quiet. Then took a deep breath. She appeared to have calmed down.

Veronica : "It appears that we are not getting anywhere with this."

She lowered her hand which had the weapon, and spoke loudly.

Veronica : "I am Vincenza Scylax, wife of high Primus Ajax Scylax. My husband and I were "summoned" here through a spatial distortion created with extinct Maximar technology... Inside the spatial distortion is appears that I was separated from him thanks to a certain human. I am currently extremely aggravated because of the unknown circumstances where my essentially infant husband has been isolated with nary a hope at surviving if something more dangerous then your pathetic race were to find him..."