《Remarkable (Dance Moms Fic)》Chapter 9: Thunderstruck in Las Vegas
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The next morning, everybody was at the Fern Adair Conservatory of the Arts, which is a dance studio that they would be rehearsing in.
"Welcome to Las Vegas!" Abby told the girls and their moms.
"All right, before we get started with assignments, here's something we've got to inform you about. Vivi and Cathy left the team after our previous competition, Shane came up with the idea to have a replacement take her spot for the remainder of this season and the replacement will be..." Shane revealed the covered photo and it turned out to be the headshot of a girl with brown hair and brown eyes that was around 7. "Brooke Kosinski aka Brookie and her mother Hollie!"
The girls cheered as Brookie walked in and Mackenzie was so happy to have her best friend on the team as Brookie's mother, Hollie walked in as well and stood with the moms.
"Kenzie!" Brookie exclaimed as she and Mackenzie hugged.
"Hey, Brookie!" Mackenzie stated, then Brookie and Hollie were introduced to Megan and Sylvia.
"All right, now we got that out of the way, let's get to pyramid." Abby began by revealing Vivi-Anne's picture and it had a red circle and line. "Vivi-Anne, not here because her mother was quite clear that they weren't coming to Vegas with us, Vivi-Anne is gonna suffer because of that. Her mother didn't want to follow the rules i laid, so here's some advice for all of you and your mothers, if you don't follow the rules and don't give me 100%, i will remove your routine from the competition."
"Cathy's a bird brain that hasn't left the cage." Shane commented and everybody laughed, including Abby.
Abby unveiled the next photo, which was Mackenzie's headshot. "Mackenzie, i'm sorry you lost your original duet partner, but thankfully with Brookie here, you'll be able to do the duet for next week, so i want you and Brookie to sit this one out. However, i want you to practice all the jumps."
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"Got it." Mackenzie stated.
Brooke's headshot was revealed next and it was on the middle row. "Brooke, you haven't been winning lately and despite your performance in last week's group being a disaster, you've been talking about being in Cirque since you were little, somebody from Cirque will be judging you, so you'll be doing a solo."
Brooke nodded.
"Next is Nia." Abby revealed Nia's headshot. "Last week back home in Chicago, you finally won your category despite your mother's griping, i hope your mother trusts me now and does not question my every move. It is what you do on stage that matters. This week, you'll be getting another solo and i expect you to win."
"Gotcha." Nia stated.
"And on top we have... Paige." Paige's headshot was revealed. "You did a great job, you need to bring it more and you've got the look, so therefore, you have a solo and like Brooke, this is your city and we know Shane's got a solo too. Maddie, Chloe, you both have the week off from solos, but you two will be in the group dance no ifs, ands, buts or maybes. Shane, how about you explain what the theme is for the group dance?"
"All right, where are we at?" Shane asked.
"Las Vegas!" The girls replied.
"Does anyone know another name that they call this city?"
Brooke raised her hand. "Sin City."
"She got it! The concept of contemporary dance is Sin City, but i'll be called Sinful, all right, let's begin, moms, you're dismissed and girls, put your bags away. We've got a competition to prepare for." The girls all put their bags away and Shane went into another room with Gianna and Sylvia helping him with his routine as Abby was helping the girls with their group dance.
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They rehearsed through that week and Paige's solo was called Tongue Twister, Nia's solo was called Missing You and Brooke's solo was called Metamorphosis and Shane's solo was called Push It To The Limit and Abby took Shane, Megan, Sylvia and the girls out for ice cream and in Shane's hotel room the day before the competition, Kelly came by and she got into an argument with Abby and Shane, accusing them of setting Paige up to fail.
(Shane's solo for Push It To The Limit: white suit jacket, red button down shirt and white pants)
At the Thunderstruck competition, the girls got 7th and Kelly got into another argument with Abby and as a result, Abby had no choice but to pull Paige's solo, Brooke got third and during her solo, her shoulder popped out, Nia didn't place and Shane got first place, then they were on their way to Los Angeles.
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2/17 NOTICE: I'm putting this on hiatus, possibly permanently. I didn't want to spam with an "update chapter", so hopefully here and in the story blurb will get enough eyeballs. There are a couple reasons for ending SSA for now. 1) I wrote the next chapter but wasn't happy with it. I've been less and less satisfied with SSA's quality the more I thought about it. Part of the reason is... 2) I am seriously thinking about trying to publish some novels to help pay the bills, since I don't have my other source of income anymore. I have never asked for anything from SSA readers, no money, not even a review or rating. SSA is written for fun to amuse myself, primarily, and I would kind of feel bad actually charging someone money for something as unserious as that. I don't think it is good enough to ask anything in return. To use an analogy from music, SSA is more like a jam session with a bunch of friends. You're just chiling and having fun playing some music. I mean, if you are Mozart or even Eminem, your jam session is good enough to sell, but for an amateur beginner like myself, haha, no. If I want to publish something, I feel like I need to go the proper route of practice and rehearsals, which might be more similar to a classical concert performance. With SSA, I work from worldbuilding notes and a loose outline, but what you are essentially getting is the first draft with lots of so-called pantsing. Pushing out a web novel like this also means it is very difficult to go back and improve things without breaking everything else downstream. I wanted to try this "jamming" approach, as it was a good way to teach me about another aspect of writing, but to move forward, I think I need to hone my "classical" techniques, which emphasize rewriting, or at least, revising outlines. 3) While I intend to try to make $$$, my actual current goal is to "get gud". I've spent a lot of time recently trying to understand the self-publishing industry, and I'm pretty sure I can make some money by using short-term strategies with my current amateur skill level. But I've seen too many authors come and go/burnout, and really, the only way that I think I can enjoy writing and still make money on a long-term basis is to become a better writer. And the next step for me, which I haven't done much before, is to spend more time on rewriting and outlines. That is pretty much antithetical to the way SSA is developing. I've always been kind of 20/80 plotting/pantsing, but I want to spend a lot more time outlining before I even start writing. SSA jam sessions don't really fit my goal anymore. If you're curious about what's next, read on... Among other regrets, I regret not finishing SSA. It's the first story I've dropped, but then again, it's the first web novel I've attempted, so I suppose that's not a surprise. I don't think traditional web novel formats suit me that well. The whole SSA story I had loosely planned (beyond a first book or major arc) is way too large as well. Big story = good for neverending webnovel with Patreons, bad for penniless and fickle writer like me. I am currently outlining a complete trilogy to another story in great detail. I want the story to end concisely, and I also want the chance to really spend a lot of time on the full outline to spot pacing problems, character issues, lost themes, and so on. I'll still share this story on RR. What I intend to do is finish book 1, flash-publish the whole thing here for a few weeks, then publish on the big Zon. Repeat for books 2 and 3. The upcoming story will be about crafting heroes. The backdrop is an isekai-like setting, where elves will summon humans to their world as heroes, but the whole hero crafting business is still in its infancy. The elven mage researchers are figuring out how to imbue heroes with power, while the heroes are trying to figure out how to use the powers that they gain. Humans are the best hero templates because they are blank and have no intrinsic magic. Or at least that what the elves thought. The human MC has his own secrets... There will be some similarities with litrpgs, but I would call it more a progression fantasy or gamelit story. For example, the stats are very low, at least initially. Say we have a stat called Str. Going from Str = 1 to Str = 2 is a huge deal. Also, going from Dex = 0 to Dex = 1 is an even bigger deal. I guess you could call it a "low-stat litrpg", haha. Also, the heroes won't be gaining stats simply by killing things or leveling up. You can't increase stats arbitrarily, either. There will be rules to how stats can increase, and how they work with each other. The elven mages will be figuring out these rules in order to craft stronger and stronger heroes. 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