《The Guide》Not a chapter, just a poll to decide one.
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Hey guys, I'm currently writing chapter 5 and there's something I want to know.
Do you guys mind extremely broken english?
I'm stuck between 2 styles. One's semi-modern who I think is too advanced for the period and one's so primitive that writing it is both giving me a headache and causing my grammar senses to go haywire and I personally think it's a crime.
Here's a sample of both:
The semi-modern one:
Semi-modern:
Cold… So cold…
Cave is cold…
I hate cold… I hate snow…
I hug mama, but mama is also cold…
Please, let cave be warm… please…
Listen, young child.
A voice in my head? I heard about it before.
I look at a carving in the corner, “Awa?”.
Some in cave look at me. Some laugh at me, others just ignore me.
Maybe it is the cold. Playing tricks.
The extremely primitive one:
Primitive:
Cold… So cold…
Cave is cold…
I hate cold… I hate snow…
I hug mama, but mama is also cold…
Please, cave be warm… please…
Listen, young child.
Voice in head? heard about before.
I look, carving in corner, “Awa?”.
Some in cave look. Some laugh, others ignore.
Maybe cold. Playing tricks.
Please tell me which to use.
I also made this on Webnovel and I'm going to write the chapter based on the sum of both sites.
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