《The Return Of The Broken》This is not a chapter. You can comment on any improvments you want me to make.
Advertisement
So, we've come this far.
I've hit 17k on views a little while back, and I'm glad you guys support me with this story.
I have to tell you, starting to write was a whole new experience for me, I had never done anything like this before. With my 14th birthday coming up soon, you can tell I'm not as old as SOME of the writers here on WattPad.
Welp, I'm just gonna point out on some things in my story I could have done better in, just to make me feel like I have done what I could.
The first chapter could have been a little less rushed. I could have put more detail and looked over my work before publishing it. When I finally did I noticed a few errors.
My 'getting the letter' story could have been shorter on the Eevee part, I felt a little cringey reading it back. With the whole "oh it died but with plot it came back to life" was a bit of a put off.
With the chapter before the one I most recently posted, it was honestly a mess. I started it, left it for a good long while and didn't read it through before finishing it. That one was honestly one of the worst ones since my first book which is discontinued.
Speaking of my first book, that one was an absolute mess.
Hell I didn't even know that you had to start another paragraph when someone else speaks, with the only exception being that it is a really short description like
"Blablabla" said blah, then blab replied "blablabla" or something like that. But I didn't do that, it looked like a complete mess.
Another thing, I do not check over my work after I write it, you see, what I do is write the chapter with no stops to check if it's right. That's why the chapter before was ABSOLUTELY HORRIFYING.
Advertisement
Also why I need a co-author. So they can check over my work after writing and I can do the same when they write.
God, drama and crap, really need to work on that too, I havn't put a lot of that in.
Another thing is that, you guys know, I do NOT have a schedule for writing.
It really depends if I feel on writing or not, how lazy I feel and when I actually do it, it's to keep you guys happy. I see comments about when the next update is and I try to write as much as I can. Honestly, you guys deserve better.
I don't really care if you didn't read this, this is really just to get stuff out of my system. If you did anyway, thanks for reading even if you knew it wasn't a chapter, it shows you're really interested in my story and it motivates me to write more.
Advertisement
- In Serial11 Chapters
GENESIS PRIME- New Beginning
For five millennia human kind flourished military technology advanced. In the whole milky way galaxy they found no equal, only but primitive life form to enslave planets system and star system to conquer. The greed of mankind set their sight on the neighbouring galaxy called andromeda only found tragic defeat from the first campaign and both galaxies destroyed. Traveling to the farthest edge of the universe to escape the inevitable racial demise escaping from unknown threat. Crashed in a habitable planet, in a star system that they called GENESIS PRIME, would the last survivor humans driven to extinction or would they strive again just like their primogenator did. This is an alternative universe where Nazis won the WW2 and the continuous warring guided them to progress in an advanced superior military technology, which led the Fuhrer Supremacy colonising the whole Earth and by the Empire's ruling, humans dominated the whole Milky Way Galaxy. Warning: This is a fiction alternative universe. // / // / / / This novel carries a disclaimer about the characters bearing no relation to living persons and does not necessarily reflect those of the historical figures themselves, or other fictional characters. Any similarities between the people, dialogs, event, or plot is purely coincidental. I do not in any way endorse, condone or encourage any racist/fascist behaviour, or activities associated with Nazism, the NSDAP as well as Neo-Nazi organisations.
8 162 - In Serial34 Chapters
The thought of peace
Major general Ray Brut was the best military strategist from his country. He had an elder brother who was brutally murdered. After being in shock for some time he went to uncover the mystery about his brother but then he found out the dark secret which lurks deep down the world. This story is about how Ray along with his men overcome the obstacles to change this world’s governing order and take down those who disrupts the universal peace.
8 304 - In Serial12 Chapters
A Sword Master's Travels (1)
The sword shapes the soul. The soul directs and gives the sword purpose. A traveling sword master goes between many worlds with great wanderlust.
8 159 - In Serial11 Chapters
Jess' Journey
Upon being found out for her magical abilities, the only human to have such abilities in thousands of years (not to mention her capability with other species' abilities), the human government decide to send Jess Brown to a magical school full of creatures she's only heard about in fairy tales. Hoping she can be a human ambassador for her race, she hones the abilities she's been gifted under the instructors of the school, but a war is looming. None of the other species that inhabit the Earth are happy to see what the humans have done to it. Can Jess stop them from fighting in time?
8 132 - In Serial35 Chapters
MrBeast x Reader
You move to North Carolina in order to escape your parents, you didn't realize you were gonna bump into someone who'd changed your life.-Events are not gonna be in order, which I apologize for.-*includes swearingNO INAPPROPRIATE THINGS, i think its slightly disrespectful to write things about a real life person that might make them insecure or uncomfortable.This was created before Maddie and Jimmy become a public relationship.
8 216 - In Serial12 Chapters
I want to play this deadly game again.
CONGRATULACION!!!!! You are the first one to finish this hardest, deadliest, most brutal game and bigest game that I have ever created!!!! (???) .... (???) I know that you are happy. But lets go to business. What is your wish? (???) .... .... I want to play this game again. It is my first ever doint this kind of thing and it will probably be realy bad (or good lets hope so) so dont punch me to bad. Also anglish isn't my first language. Story contains: Gore Mature content (not detailet for now) Mature language And ofc pridefuls young masters (not a lot)
8 160

