《Layers Of Suffering (Tokoyami BNHA)》Comment On My Story... (Not A Chapter)
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Latest update: 28/9/19
Firstly, I have to apologise for those who are expecting a new chapter to arrive. I hate authors notes, but I feel this is a required step to take to further improve my story.
Since it's the first time I am creating a fanfic, I would like to ask a few questions about my story.
Lately, I've been feeling that I am dragging the story for a bit too long.
I have a few options that states the problem of my work.
1. Too many flashbacks.
2. Doesn't get to the point fast.
3. Confusing, hard to understand.
4. Illogical events, plot holes.
5. Redundant events.
6. Drabby events. Boring or too factual.
7. Lack of humour.
8. Bad English. Sentence structure, Grammer, spelling or incorrect use of vocabulary or words.
9. Storyline isn't impactful, too less emotion or description.
10. Any other criticisms.
Either state the numbers (can be more than one) you agree on, preferably with explanations but totally fine with just numbers.
Of course, if you feel that any of the points stated or other points that you think I did well in my story. Feel free to mention it if you do want to point it out.
Using these criticism, I may either try to improve future chapters or try to rewrite entire chapters if the chapters become too bland to continue. (probably either a separate chapter in the same story or if a chapter is seriously too bad, replace an existing chapter with the edited version.)
I want my readers to be a part of the story, ending it appropriately with lots of emotion and passion.
Seriously, thank you for reading my Fanfic. I hope I have entertained you well with my story and have a great day ahead.
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