《The fight for freedom》User input and extra info thread (13-5-2015)
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Well, I decided to remove all notes about DN, since this story will no longer be a fanfic of DN, but an original story.
The single change is as such.
Saint haven -> Ostmont (yes, I randomly generated this name, sorry)
If anyone has any suggestions for this arc, or the next, please tell me!
Same goes for the people who has any opinions on the characters and the story! Especially if you feel that either is horrible!
Anything important will be placed here, and any questions here I will reply to the best of my abilities.
Arc 0 Dusk
Spoiler :
Age: 21
Appearance: Wears a worn out old coat at all times, when he's doing quests. Wears a blue undershirt inside, with brown trousers and leather boots. He has short dark blue hair, in a regular haircut, and he has piercing black eyes.
Backstory: After being taken in by Drax, he was trained for 4 years, before graduating into an adventurer. He was forced into a Culling Event, and Drax saved him by destroying Dusk's supposed enemies before Dusk had to fight them. The culling event ended with 1 survivor, not counting the escaped Drax, who was later found dead along with almost a hundred assassins.
Since then, he had sworn to get revenge for his old Master, and was scouted out by John(Alias) 4 years later. Now, he, along with John and a few others, are working behind the scenes to find out the person controlling everything, and to beat his sorry ass.
Weapons: One handed longsword, with magical cards. These magic cards come in various colors, each representing an element. He most commonly uses grey cards, which is neutral/time/space cards, but also often uses the blue card [Clean]
Armor: Barrier magic. He uses basic 1-way barrier magic for most cases. After meeting Shiina, he developed a card that allows him to summon a pair of floating shields to block attacks.
Extra info: He never changes out of his clothes, instead, uses [Clean] to clean his body and clothes.
Arc 0 Shiina
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Age 18
Appearance: A little girl that doesn't even look like she is 15 years old. She has short shoulder length caramel hair, with hazel eyes. She usually wears a long sleeved shirt with a pair of jeans, covering her power armor that looks like a black jumpsuit. On normal occasions, she prefers skirts instead of jeans, and a simple t-shirt instead of a long sleeved one.
Backstory: After being taken by Elanor, she studied under her guidance for 11 years, before finally graduating. She applied to be an adventurer to learn more of the world she had missed out on.
That is just about it.
Weapon: 1.8 meter long cannon with a diameter of 50cm. Extremely heavy. Can load up to 32 regular explosive rockets, but has a single spot for unique ammo.
Armor: Power Armor's shield. It can protect her from all types of harm, both physical and magical, but it doesn't remove the force of the attacks, only dampens it. The shield drains the power armor's battery quite a lot though, so most of the time it would be turned off.
Extra info: She isn't a human, and on her status plate, she is known as a 'Human?'. She has a decent mana pool, but cant cast any form of magic, nor can she use magic cards without a tool to emit mana.
Arc 1: Clint
Spoiler :
Age: 9
Appearance: Caramel colored hair, like his father, he does not make a specific hairstyle, instead, he lets it grow normally. His eyes are Hazel coloured like his mother, but has the piercing gaze of his father. Often told that his 'angry' and 'annoyed' face looks more natural than his smiling face, even if its a natural smile. He wears his uniform, a white shirt with black trousers, everyday, even on weekends and breaks. He would get a disposable cloak when he goes on missions, to protect his uniform from monster blood. He also wears a jacket during winter. He is taller than an average boy of his age.
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Backstory: After being born in a laboratory in the Red Zone, a huge area that is marked 'deadly' by humans, he grew up with his mom mostly, learning how to dual wield from his robot butler, Alferdo. He also tried magic cards, but he grew bored of it quickly. He would stay with his parents most of the time, often going out with Dusk on his hunting trips. He also learned basic mechanics, occasionally building various weapons with his mom.
He reads a lot, like his father, but he doesnt like reading books with similar stories. Because of his father, he had never read some books that has a [13+] or [16+] rating. (Mostly, sexual related books)
After learning about AAA, he trained hard in order to be admitted into AAA, not knowing that there is no such thing as an entrance test.
Personality: Seems innocent, although has quite a trove of knowledge he doesn't know how to use. Quite oblivious to love,in the sense that he is unaware that he has a crush on Ashley. Somewhat smart, and has really good reaction and thinking speed. Is immune to the sight of monster blood, due to his constant ventures in the red zone with his father. Prefers to avoid trouble instead of facing them, if possible, and could be said to be a coward.
Weapon: A one handed pistol (65cm in length), with a one handed short sword (1 meter in length). The pistol is a new design by Shiina, and it gives him many ways to improve it however he likes. It absorbs mana from the surroundings, and can reduce the effect of magics if he uses it to block magical attacks.
Armor: Has no armor. At all. Relies on Ashley a lot in defense.
Extra info: He isn't human, and, like his mother, on a status plate, he is a (Human?). Also, his mana pool is non-existent, and he can only cast 4 beginner grade spells, at 9 years old, before he runs out of it. Like his dad, he is left handed.
Arc 1: Ashley Dewspark
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Age: 9
Appearance: She has really long silver hair, which is the easiest way to recognize her. Her hair is long enough to reach the ground, when it isn't tied up. Normally, she would make a few braids for that. She wears her uniform, a black blazer, with a white shirt underneath, and a long skirt, which she changed into a short one during her second year. Wears a vest instead of a blazer during summer. In the maid cafe, she wears a pink maid outfit.
Backstory: She was still a baby when her family lost their nobility. They entrusted their child to an orphanage, and quickly left. Their corpse was found the next day, a day away from the town.
Since then, she had grown up in the orphanage. Since she had silver hair, she was bullied slightly, but it was quickly stopped by the warden. She spent most of her time studying about magic, focusing on healing because the other boys often get themselves hurt. When she wanted to learn attack magic, she realized that, for beginners, she had to attack cute little rabbits, and quickly gave up on it. Reality wasn't so nice on her, though, and she had realized it after Clint murdered a rabbit in front of her.
Personality: Due to a previous incident, she cant stand others looking at her too much. She gets afraid quickly, and she couldn't talk to most people. Because of all of these, she strives to improve herself, especially for Clint.
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Weapon: Staff of the Dewspark. The last item of her family. It is normally a small piece of wood, which she carries around in her pocket. When supplied with a constant stream of mana, it would expand into a staff. The mana required is minimal, so it can stay in staff form for days with little mana. Clint can only do it for an hour.
Armor: A basic magical robe that dampens physical and magical attacks. Can be obtained in any normal adventurer's clothing shop.
Extra information: Has a hidden yandere personality, but because her target is Clint, it had never awakened, and hence, she has the desire to not harm anyone. Things might change if it awakens, though...
Arc 1: ???. Known as Nobody by Clint.
Spoiler :
Age: 9
Appearance: Has maroon colored hair, which is unique. He never goes to the barber, instead, cutting his own hair with a knife, hence it is always shaggy. He has amber eyes, with a curious glint, yet it has something, a sharp look, inside. He wears his school uniform at all times, even during weekends and breaks. He wears an additional overcoat during winter. In engineering classes, and when he is at the workshops, he wears a white coat. (like a lab coat)
Backstory: He fled from his home, which he never told anyone, and joined AAA to study for engineering. He had learned various martial arts ever since he was a kid, and hence can fight with almost all weapons skillfully. Because he had entered a 'forbidden' room at night, he is surprisingly knowledgeable at everything sexual related. He had traveled halfway to AAA by foot, before realizing that there was a teleport gate is most major towns directly to AAA.
Personality: A pervert through and through. Gets really excited at girls, although he hides it well. Even so, girls naturally hate him, and is scared of him. This does not apply to girls which are taken, because he doesn't target them. Does not discriminate among girls. All girls are accepted!
He is really smart, and catches on things easily. Most of the times, he would make assumptions alone, before consulting others. He isn't too good at engineering, but instead, is very hard working on it. To everything else though, he would slack off quickly.
Weapons, and armor: Various floating weapons he call 'Drones'. Has 8 knives, 3 orbs, and a pair of shields. The knives can extend when given a command, lengthening it. It is controlled by 2 points, the tip of the knife, as well as the pommel, and so, could spin in and slash enemies. The orbs, when used, will float around him, and fire when he supplies a burst of mana to his remote. Due to lack of sensitivity, all orbs will fire together when a surge of mana is supplied. The shileds are controlled like a knife, but it comes in a form of a tiny ball. When it absorbs enough mana, it will create a shield that can take quite a few hits. Unlike Clint's pistol, it cannot absorb mana from spells.
He wears no armor, instead, uses his shield. Relies on Ashley a lot on defense.
Extra info: He worships a book.
Arc 1: 天川 黒 (Amagawa Kuro)
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Age: 14
Appearance: Tall and womanlike. She has waist length black hair, and black eyes, and wears a black trousers, with a black army coat, and black boots.
The only thing not black would be her skin, the single red stripe on her trousers, and the bandage over her breasts. Imagine a 番長(banchou, delinquent leader).
In the maid cafe, she wears a black and white maid outfit.
Backstory: Ever since she was a kid, she had never left her village, Nippon. She trained there for many years, meeting Rigel when she was 6 years old, and trained with him. As the heir of her family, she learned the deadly yet powerful dances, with Rigel as her partner.
When she was 10, her father heard about AAA, and sent her and Rigel over. They reached there at 11 years old, and joined AAA then.
She met Kyle and Albert on their 3rd year, and formed a group together.
She officially started going out with Rigel at 15. Nothing changed whatsoever though.
Personality: Brutal, insane, and battle hungry when in her uniform (the 番長 outfit). Her main goal is to fight stronger and stronger enemies. She would avoid using dances, but will end up unconsciously using it anyways, forcing Rigel to calm her down.
When not in her outfit, she would lose her insane personality, and instead, turn into a maiden in love.
Weapon: Black Katana, from her family. Sacred Dances, from her family. She uses normal techniques for normal battles, but would activate her dances in a pinch. Her dances require a , before she could use any of the moves. The initiation usually has multiple requirements, Frost Snowbell requiring low surrounding temperature, Black Lotus requiring deep hatred.
Most of her dances, especially Frost Snowbell and Blood Rose, as well as a few unused ones, include a huge personality shift, and the desire for murder, as well as a gradual consumption of her mind. It can be calmed with her key's .
Armor: She naturally coats herself in a coat of mana, that protects her. Her coat is also surprisingly durable, and has resistance to fire and ice.
Extra info: She owned a Black Cat, also called Kuro, but it ran away some time ago. She is still sad over it.
Arc 1: Rigel
Spoiler :
Age: 14
Appearence: Somewhat short for his age. He has long blond hair, and green bandana with a red tip. He wears a camouflage shirt, pants and boots. He is usually seen having a mischievous smile, but sometimes with a dark and calculating one instead.
Backstory: His parents died on a hunting trip when he was left at Nippon at 6 years old. Since then, he had lived there, accompanying a girl called Kuro. While Kuro was trained in the dances, he undergone a even more harsh training, one that can nullify all dances, and forcefully stop them. He acts as Kuro's Key, and because of that, follows her everywhere, even to AAA.
He often works behind the scenes, ever since he became a key, to protect Kuro. Met Albert when he tried to prank Kuro, and stopped him, but they soon became friends, and he introduced Albert to Kuro, leading to the formation of the group between Kuro, himself, Albert and Kyle.
Personality: Calculating, and over protective. As long as Kuro allows him to stalk her, he would stalk her. Although he would normally, from the outside, tease Kuro, it is only to keep her comfortable. Still, he trusts her to keep herself safe most of the time.
Because of how he listens to all her words, including her telling him not to follow her during work hours, he ended up having no idea that Kuro works in a maid cafe.
Weapons: Magic gloves, short bow, . He is trained in summoning magical arrows, as well as shooting real, and magical arrows. Other than that, he knows the way to counter every single one of Kuro's dances, and stop it before it consumes her.
Armor: Basic leather armor, and camouflage. He prefers to hide instead of facing his enemy directly. In case he has to, he has leather armor to protect himself, somewhat.
Extra info: He is weak to Kuro's body, despite how shameless he can be in words.
Arc 1: Carla
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Age: 7 (in the beginning of arc 1), 9 (In Chapter 7)
Appearance: Has the average height of a 7 year old. Her hair color is like her mom's, and is slightly longer than shoulder length, and is split into 2 parts, tied with a headband each. Normally, she would have the hair in front of her, but while fighting, they would be behind her. (How to I even describe this?). She has a round face, and bright hazel eyes. She would wear her school uniform (Blazer + shirt + short skirt with knee socks), during summer, she would switch the blazer with a vest. She always has a magical pouch, and a card deck on her belt, the former on the right, and the latter on her left.
Her hair looks like this, but smoother.(I DO NOT OWN THE ART, original link: http://www.deviantart.com/art/Hairstyles-Part-1-255229340)
Backstory: Unlike her brother, she would rarely go out with her father, and prefers staying at home to write magic cards. Recently though, after her brother entered AAA, she started training on how to fight with her dad. Unlike her brother, she reads few books. Again, she spends most of her time in training her magic circle formulas.
Personality: Cheerful, and helpful. Always wishes the best for everyone, even if she has to sacrifice herself. Would willingly talk to anyone, and tries to initiate conversations with anyone if possible. Hates being alone, but can stand it if required.
Unlike her brother and father, she has little interest in books. And hence, is far more innocent and ignorant compared to her brother. She is very interested in things including magic, but doesn't exactly like, or is interested in anything else.
Weapons: Magic cards. She has magic cards of all elements, and often adds new spells to her spell deck. Generally, she, has no weaknesses to any enemy that does not resist all magics overall, and has a spell for every situation.
Armor: Mana shield spell. She wears no armor, instead, relies on a 'Mana Shield' spell, that gives her a layer of protection.
Extra info: Like her mother, her race is 'Human?'. Her mana pool is insanely huge, as well as her mana regeneration, but she has no way to use it, as her body's mana conductivity is horrible. Surprisingly, she can draw magic circles with ease, as if her mana conductivity problem does not exist.
She absolutely hates veggies.
Thanks for reading my story!
Current plans
Complete arc 1
Revamp arc 0
Fill up the time between arc 0 and 1 through short stories
Learn Japanese
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