《The Empath [hidden]》Announcement
Advertisement
Fuuuu......it took unexpectedly long to correct mistakes in previous chapters, anyway corrected it as much as possible, please enjoy.
As I am an amateur writer I have little idea on what to work in my story, it sure could be nice to get some opinion on that, so I decided to make it a little interesting, for each good advise, suggestion, opinion I will do a extra chapter, though only 4 max per day, if it exceeds 4 I fill follow up on the next day.
Just to be sure I am not asking for review or rating, just tell me your opinion on story so far, any suggestion and advise are also welcome
Edit : the story is still in development phase intractable with nice and players will start soon, though it won't be much due to mc introverted personality.
AND SPECIAL THANKS TO tomolone for helpful suggestions
Advertisement
- In Serial7 Chapters
Semi-Risen
A life of mediocracy is ended in a freak accident. However this does not turn out to be the end. Waking up in a strange space with no memory Roger is informed that he has in fact died. Struggling to understand what is going on he is soon thrust into danger and misery. What is the place of someone constantly ignored and overlooked in a world where the gods compete and war through the souls of the departed? Where actions in life gets turned into strength after death. Where the weak get cast aside to perish while the strong are revered as champions. To what lengths will those cast aside have to go to in order to survive? Cover art is made by amazing artist Lihallerix. http://loy-ashivara.deviantart.com/
8 59 - In Serial52 Chapters
Path Of The Cultured Uncultured One
Gu Yang, despite his name, is American and has lived there ever since he was born, but one day while he was jogging, an unexpected phenomenon occurred, and he was taken to an unknown realm.
8 204 - In Serial11 Chapters
How to become an evil overlord!
Nicolas Aukye kinda hates life, just kinda. There are many good things about life, and he knows that. The problem is, it's a bit difficult to enjoy life when you are trapped within the white walls of a hospital. Don't get me wrong, he doesn't have cancer or some other depressing incurable illness, nor is he lonely and sad, and he is definitely not just plain cuckoo. There's nothing wrong with him, except for the fact that he has two personalities, but that's not important. It wasn't something he was born with, nor something he resents. He just changed a bit when his mother locked him in an abandoned cellar for a few years, and he had to get on with life eating rats 'n' stuff. As I said, don't sweat the small details, and he's fine, because all that stress is gone once he massacres and wrecks havoc for a bit, oh, not in real life, of course, he's not in jail. Like I explained, perfectly normal, just don't mind the small details too much. (First story, I get C in English so, not a good sign. Trying to improve writing skills.) (casual story, lacks effort. I'm as lazy as Tanaka-kun (reference to tanaka-kun is always listless) you are warned) (Inspired by some of my favourites, Everybody loves large chests, Re:Hamster, World Seed and more) (Please don't kill me for mistakes, I'm probably gonna make a sh*t ton of em) (Also, how do I upload a cover page from my Ipad?)
8 101 - In Serial61 Chapters
A Secret Service [NOW PUBLISHED]
Now available in paperback!"I LOVE IT!" - CarniaHolmes "I'm going to break your nose, because I don't like your face," Carter said. She pointed to Zac. "I'm going to dislocate your other shoulder, just to make them even." She cocked her head and gave the main guy a sickly sweet smile."I'm going to break your wrist, taking away your baseball career. And finally you, Finch," she said, looking to the last guy. "I'm going to bust your ankle because I don't like the way you walk." She slid her hands into her pockets. "Now, how does that sound to all of you? And please feel free to look amused, skeptical or patronizing at this point. I'll have all the more fun wiping the expressions off your faces." Carter Owens, daughter of a Secret Service agent, is trained to disassemble any weapon, any situation, and anyone. Her biting sarcasm and razor-sharp mind make her impossible to beat in a word fight and when talking doesn't work, she uses her fists. She attends Hamilton Prep, Washington D.C.'s most prestigious high school, where everyone is related to someone in power, except her. When Hamilton Prep receives a flood of new students, Carter's role as social outcast changes when she makes two unexpected friends. Friends who are hiding a secret. As Carter uncovers the truth, she confronts challenges she is unequipped to handle and finds herself in a dangerous situation. For a girl trained to see everything, Carter never saw this coming."This is one of those books that seem like it won't be really good, but then it's mindblowing-ly amazing and then you're questioning life =)" - rwrites07"#rr for like the 10th time haha love this book" - tahls16 "I loved this book, it wasn't cringey cliche or stupid. I normally hate third person books but I loved this and all the characters, especially carter." - lenathedov Editor's Choice Talk of The Town#1 Teen Fiction, #1 Fiction #1 Love#1 Completed#1 New Adult#1 Friendship#1 Funny#1 Drama
8 113 - In Serial21 Chapters
2/3
17 year old lake Rivins was abused by his father and raped by his fathers pimp...he's traumatized and lonely. His ex best friends moved away leaving him in complete darkness. what happens when his father dies and he moves to Orlando with his mother and sees the best friends that left him? Forgive or forget...Short story TW: Abuse, Rape, panic attacks, self harm, suicide mention, mature contentBoyxboyxboy book short story
8 127 - In Serial20 Chapters
A Dark Past (Aphmau FNAF meets MyStreet)
When an old friend of Aphmau's past returns, her friends begin to question Aphmau's excuses for coming home late from her night job. Eventually, curiosity gets the best of them and they push it too far, only to find a dark secret. Not even a healed mind, can fix a broken heart.-----------------------------I do not own Aphmau's characters or her Mystreet/FNAF roleplays. I do own my OC Jay.
8 99
Prev Chap
Next Chap
Chap List
Boy
Girl
