I would like feedback and I have edited ch 1 and two to have tables then during the poll i will go back and edit the wording and mistakes.

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Finishing dissecting it I noted that it had a heart on each side of the chest and only a single lung. Their biggest weak points are the eyes, neck, and lower back where a softer part of the spine is. I decided to throw the bodies off at the back porch so if something hungry comes along by tonight or tomorrow morning it can eat and will hopefully leave after that. I then proceeded to train my control on using multiple ice needles, and controlling my ice creations to make them thinner, sharper, and colder until the morning.

That’s when I noticed, that I gained new items.

Health Potionx 1Spirit Potionx 3Goldx 9

I can only guess where the gold came from but it’s most likely from killing the goblins which would confirm my thought on how the inventory works. Let me review what I know. First is the powers it is easy to use, as long as you view it as a part of yourself, but still difficult without practice. The next thing is the messages, what I know about that is next to nothing and I don’t have the time to deal with it or the power. Finally the inventory, it seems as if I can take out all of it but can not put it back in, then when I kill something I will gain gold or possibly items, and one suspicion that I can not test until I meet people. Now I am ready to leave, I pick up my clothes and get dressed in a black t-shirt with a grey jacket with a hood, and black jeans. tieing the stone sword into a homemade sheath for my back so it cannot hinder my movement more than the weight will, I then pick up the unbreakable vial (I tested it) with the red liquid and put it into my pants pocket. Then my gaze comes to the the the broken front door and I remember what happened the past two days.

I dissected the goblins on the first day, and practiced my powers yesterday a total of nine days and now I'm ready to head out. I peek out the front door and look around for anything dangerous to no avail. Walking out the door I hear a loud crash from behind me. I looked shocked at what happened and what it was…….. a giant man of flesh stitched together. it had one arm bigger than the other that was the size of me while the other was was only half the other it was about 7 feet tall and stitches all over its body not even a face just flesh and stitches.

It started making its way towards me slowly, but I just stayed there looking at it wide eyed, stunned I never expected something like this. Something completely disgusting and repulsing, I just could not react to what I was seeing right now, until it was right in front of me swinging its massive arm at me. I pulled of my stone sword to block while forming two ice walls as hard as stone with spikes facing the flesh hoping to stop or slow it down. The next thing I know I'm flying outside along with shards of ice and my used to be stone weapon that turned into rubble flying with me into the dirt and grass. I got up as fast as I could with my wounded body, looking over my body I noticed that my right arm, that I used to block was turning completely blue and black, with my right shoulder apparently dislocated also, and a bulge of blue on the left of my stomach I could barely move and the world was spinning but I needed to concentrate on that MONSTER in front of me. With what voice I had left, I yelled.

“What are you bitch”

it was then when a blue window over his head appeared.

Flesh golemRank B-

Shit I was fairly sure goblins would be ranked F compared to this….. but no time to think about that no since I am too injured to run, all I can do is fight and hope for that slim chance of survival. I formed ice spikes as big as pinkys and started sending them into the joints of the monster. However I found out that it was entirely flesh, no bone, or joints. Although I kept hitting it, it never slowed down it reached me when I shot around my fiftieth shot and tried to hit me however it was slow, although I can't move or stop it I can at least move my powers. I formed a circle of ice underneath me and use it to levitate above it’s head, I was breathing really heavily and I felt incredibly cold especially in my chest, I knew, I had to end it fast so I formed the largest spike I could possibly make, as hard and cold as I can. When I could not hold it anymore I let it fall on the head of the flesh golem that was searching for where I was.

“DIE!” I yelled with the last of my breath, before dropping the 350 lbs ice spike on it and it worked perfectly as the golem got impaled from the weight and the force of the fall it split like a blueberry and a pencil. as did my control on ice went away, I fell onto the ground with a thud, I felt pain everywhere, I knew I was dieing while my consciousness was fading away. That was when I remembered my last chance. As I reached into my pocket and pull out the health potion. I never tested it before this is my last hope, I opened the vial and with my cold hands I drunk the entire vial, I instantly feel much better, as I move my hands over my skin, it was as smooth as a baby and all my swelling was like it never happened. However, I still felt an intense cold in my chest and not the warmth of my spirit, so I knew spirit is something like mana. I instantly went into my inventory and pull out a spirit potion, it was half the size of a pinky and contains some sort of golden liquid, as I drink it I feel the warmth of my spirit returning. I know it might have been a waste, since it was returning slowly but that was my first time using all of my spirit, and I did not like being in the open and weak for anything to kill me. I knew from the goblins, that when I open my inventory there will be some new items.

“Items”

Health Potionsx 1Spirit Potionsx 2Black iron swordx 1Ability Bookx 1Goldx 147

Yes I got good equipment for the risk and an actual sword to replace the ‘sword’. As I was engrossed in checking my inventory, I did not notice the shadow behind me until it was to late as a second flesh golem attempts to swing at me and instead of blocking I used my ice to throw me away as I hit my head again, knocking me out again. The last thing I saw, was a bunch of people fighting it, as one person is examining the melted ice that killed the golem I fought. I really hope me getting knocked out won't become a habit.