《Savior University》Mistakes I Made and A Few Info
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So, I've noticed after quickly checking some of my past chapters, I might have wrote some mistakes about portraying such things.
First off, Akira's way of calling girls.
Akira never calls girls beside his family their first or last name.
He calls them by their last names rarely, and he should have never, never called them by their first name except for the cute hero chapter.
Secondly, Mitsuko's way of speaking should be elegant.
She becomes scary when she's angry, (keeping her elegant smile while having an intimidating aura), but she should speak like royalty.
Third, Keima's way of calling Akira.
He usually calls him 'moron' or 'mongrel', I wanted to make him call him 'neanderthal', but another anime already did that.
He should be the prideful, gaming addicted, but intelligent, pipsqueak, who even though he's short, likes talking down on people.
He's supposed to be cute as well.
Fourth, I don't know if this is a huge deal, but I didn't want people to think this was too cringy to read. So I made Akio call Akira 'bro'.
In japanese, he's supposed to be calling him 'Aniki', not onii-chan, unlike how Ana and...another person would call him.
Fifth, I think I mentioned Megumi wearing a cap on the entrance exam.
I wanted to make her like that pink haired girl in air gear.
That sort of cheerful attitude, but she's pure and innocent as hell.
I planned to make her wear it all the time, but decided not to, because I knew I'd definitely forget it.
I never ever mentioned it again, nor made any characters ask about it though...
Let's just say that was part of her highschool uniform in the past.
Here's some additional info I wanna add:
Height Comparison of some characters from tallest to shortest:
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1 X-tinct
2Uncle Takehito, Sir Knight
3Ken Takahashi
4Takumi Shikaku, Akira Ishikawa, Akio Ishikawa, Watanabe Izanagi, Kazuki Inoue, Eiji Kagayaku and Kami Nagai
(I know, right? Where'd the 'diversity' go? Well, most of these people are those that see eye to eye with Akira so... You'll understand in later chapters.)
5Daichi Iro, Yurei Tomo, Ryuu Akarui
6Mitsuko Shimizu, Chiyo Mayou(she has longer legs), Kana Asami, Akiko Ishikawa, Kotone Kawai, Brown haired-senpai masochist
7Megumi Sasaki, Koka Kawai, Sora Yoshida, Avaron Fujimoto
8Eiko Kurokku, Hana Mizumi, Maiki Kimura
9Ai Abe
10Keima Nakamura
Bust size (for science):
1Kotone Kawai
2Akiko Ishikawa (I never mentioned this since it's Akira's mom)
3Chiyo Mayou
4Mitsuko Shimizu, brown haired senpai masochist
5Ai Abe
6Megumi Sasaki, Koka Kawai, Kana Asami
7Avaron Fujimoto, Maiki Kimura, Sora Yoshida, Eiko Kurokku
8Hana Mizumi
By the way, I drew the characters real shitty in the (drew my characters chapter)
Akira is supposed to look more like Koichi Sakakibara from another, but with Kazama Kenji's eyes from D-frag
Keima, is supposed to look...cute.
I messed up.
He's supposed to look like a shota shotacon would prey on even though he has a bowl cut.
By the way, I'll be making maybe, a side chapter, or just let the characters explain how they make Kana erase the memories of people who saw saviors using their abilities from far away places.
And something else...
The observer Sir Knight said that will be keeping on eye on Akira, was never said to have been watching him from the start.
I won't be saying who it is...but the observer started observing him after Sir Knight and the council misunderstood that Akira has been fooling around with women
(Why won't you just fix those chapters you might have made a mistake in? Proofread your past chapters,you moron!)
Sorry, bruhdas. I might fix any mistakes I made in past chapters in a later date. For now, I'm focusing on finishing the first arcs.
And I still have to explain what's up with Akira's ability.
I'll be doing that during or after the tournament so keep tuning in! 
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