《Totem Master: A Spiritual Adventure》Q/A, Reader feedback
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Hello, let us get down to business.
Some of you have been unhappy with how i write my story. This is fine. What i don't like however is that many of you never leave a comment, far too many never say a word of yea or neh.
I rely on your feedback in order to improve my writing style, that way it can be enjoyed by more people. I beleive this story has improved dramatically if you were to compare it to some of my earlier work.
Have any of you read my most popular story, "Freedom in the New World." That was the first story i began writing on Royal road.
I want to hear your comments and concerns. I want you to give me your critisism, just please don't be toxic. I am not so fragile as to shatter from a somewhat harsh truth. Whatever you have to say i can take it.
I am trying to work on my audience retention. In other words i want to get as many people interested in the story as i can, and keep them reading.
Do you have original ideas for characters, classes, items you name it. I want you to feel as if my story is a partially painted canvas, and that you can add a little bit of yourself into it. But you have to put forth some effort here guys.
What are your grievances with my story. If you read the description of my story, you will know that someone rated my story 0.5 stars. They left no comment, did not message me, they made no effort to explain why they so hated the story. They did not give critisism to or a solution to solve the problem they saw whatever it was.
I ask you to please comment on issues you see, try and make the story better instead of simply giving me the finger.
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Many of you will choose to remain silent, and there is nothing i can do about that. But please remember that you have choices. I forsee that some of you might say "I have the choice to give this shit a low rating." Why don't you like the story? What about it makes you angry or displeased?
I am a writer i am to please my audience with a grand tale that stretches one's imagination and brings them to new worlds they had not previously dreamed possible. Help me craft a world that you and your buddies can enjoy. I am more than willing to change things so the story is easier to understand. I can be more descriptive with world.
What i cannot be is you. I am me, so i am limited to my thoughts and feelings. If you want the story to improve, if you want to see the story take a sharp turn, I'll bite let's see what you guys have in store for me.
Thank all of you who have made it this far. I cherish your comments and critisism. They grant me new perspectives and give me ideas i would not have thought of on my own. Thank you all.
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