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Alright let me get straight to the point here. I want you guys to decide something.
Should i rewrite the story one chapter at a time. I have improved since i began writing of this story and with the story already flushed out more or less in my mind I believe i can adress many of the issue you guys have raised about the story.
Have i moved to fast, yes. Can i do it better given the chance, HELL YES! I want you guys to be able to enjoy my work.
Many of you have raised the point that James has become far too OP far to quickly. I can and will adress this issue in a possible rewrite of the story.
If you chose the rewrite i will leave this story up but will begin posting the revised chapters under a new title, what do you think of, "Overlord, the Guild named Freedom."
Do you like this idea? Do you hate it? I very much would appreciate your feedback on this. If you have a good idea for the new title let me hear it. If you make no suggestion i will decide on my own. I don't want to abandon this story, and i don't want people to turn back as soon as they read the first chapter.
I want to keep as many people as possible enthralled by the story. I can and will flush out the characters and the world better if you will only give me the chance.
Please leave your thoughts in the comments below.
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