《Immortal's Lament [Dropped]》Long author's note addressing concerns
Advertisement
Hello everyone, the writer here, trying to address your issues.
I had hoped I made it clear enough for everyone to understand, but the fact that it didn't, means I still have a lot of learn about writing, so that's my fault and I'm sorry for that.
Still, this is my first time writing a long-term story, so please bear with me.
Firstly, the issue of the power of the character and his power during the flashback:
I stated in chapter 10, when teaching the children, that to him, learning Energy was extremely hard because there wasn't something similar. I tried to explain it by comparing it to a caveman figuring out a book about molecular science: he doesn't even know how to read, so how could he begin to understand it?
The same counts for Acedia: he doesn't even know what Energy is, nor does he know how to grasp it, nor that his soul is linked with it, let alone how to truly use it.
He had to teach this himself. Now, imagine you are trying to understand how a star works, but without teachers, without professors, without books to help you along the way, just you and your mind trying to understand what a star is.
It's impossible. He could only do it because of his long life.
Now, about Emily.
She did have teachers. Two of them, in fact: mother and father.
She was raised in a society of Magic and trained in the use of Energy from a young age, which makes her understand it incredibly fast, much faster than Acedia.
Of course she isn't on his level, but she understands everything far quicker than Acedia ever could.
The battle.
He was mentally shaken, as seen by the flashback, so he didn't have time to prepare defence and was thus ambushed.
Advertisement
If you've read about battles involving ambushes, they never end well for the ambushed.
And, he was still worried about the children, even frantically so and since he couldn't die anyway, why not set priorities?
And when he went insane, have you ever seen a mad person fight? It looks frightening, but all they do is flail around hoping to hurt others. Compared to a calm and collected person who is hell-bent on killing things, an insane person is much easier to handle than the calm person.
Also, he didn't kill or harm Emily, Damien and Anna, because he only harms nightmares.
Nightmares laugh at him, they didn't, making him confused about what to do.
Now, I hope that explains most of your questions and reading my post again, I can definitely understand that it wasn't all that clear, seeing I needed to write this long story just to make it clear, so let me state this:
I, the writer, have this clear in my head, because I know the story in and out. The fact that this isn't clearly visible in the writings I post, means that it is entirely the fault of the writer for not making it clear enough.
I still have a lot to learn and I thank you in aiding me with this.
I will try to correct my faults in the future, but for now, I can only say that I'm sorry.
Thank you for reading, and thank you for posting feedback about what I write, it helps immensely in my writing-process and, if you have any questions, please comment and I will, hopefully, reply.
Thank you all, and have a nice weekend!
Advertisement
- In Serial1109 Chapters
Star Odyssey
A blade and a corpse on the ground. When humans first stepped foot on Neptune in the year 2200, they unlocked a vast and boundless universe ruled by different families, filled with magnificent battle techniques and ten arbiters who controlled it all!
8 3819 - In Serial31 Chapters
Emerald Forest
A nymph out to save the world from her kind and a mortal conquering her heart. Kiri’s a young dryad sent on a dangerous quest to explore a series of irregular portal openings and earn her place as a Warden, a protector of worlds. A fresh trail leads her to a planet long since abandoned by the dryads and a human soldier putting more than her mission at risk. Johann’s had his fair share of war, only for life to take on a whole new dimension when a group of mystical nymphs appear on the battlefield. His only hope in escaping the Emerald Forest and returning home lies with the stunning Kiri. She’s keeping him at bay for now, but he’s sure he can break the ice between them in time to defeat the new enemy. A part of Kiri regrets saving Johann from the clutches of evil nymphs. Not only is he loud and shows a complete lack of respect for the environment, a complete no-go by her books, but he’s also dangerously attractive for a human. Kiri’s heard plenty of stories about falling in love with mortals to know she shouldn’t.
8 136 - In Serial35 Chapters
The Witch and the Werewolf | Remus Lupin x Reader
'Aren't you afraid of me?' 'I'm more afraid of the fact that you make your bed.'What happens when you love one of your best friends a little too much?Reached Number 1 in:#lupinReached Number 2 in: #severussnape#remusxreader#remuslupinxreader
8 141 - In Serial6 Chapters
Helmschmied
When a mysterious game developer asks Zero and his friends to save a million people who are trapped inside a virtual world...they're over the moon...but they quickly realize that they have to save a lot more than a million people...they have to save all of humanity. [The Grand War Won't Be Delayed Another Century!]
8 67 - In Serial18 Chapters
Distractions (Scrutinized Tanner x reader Fanfiction)
THIS FANFICTION IS A TWO PACK OF ASS. STOP READING IT.Y/N was a very simple woman; calm, professional, and very unassuming. But when she's attacked by the local murderer, Tanner Grayton and then unknowingly forced to live with him, how will love find it's way into both of your hearts? (and undergarments)
8 158 - In Serial22 Chapters
Enemies
George and Dream once enemies from the starting of 1st grade all the way till there senior year in high school. Until they are parried up for a at home project and are forced to go to each others house. This will just be a get work done and go home kinda thing. Right?smut lolART CREDITS: vnzndt on instagram!!!!
8 59

