《Everyone is a Superhero! Apart from me》Can you spare a moment?
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Hello everyone!
I'm Daniel Newwyn and I'm the author of "Everyone is a Superhero! Apart from me". I'm writing this because I know that you guys—the readers—are a very important part and I want us to take this journey together. That is, some power to you! I'm a total noob in this genre, so I'm thinking of letting my readers decide aspects of the general direction I want to take with this book, and it starts with gathering some feedback. This chapter will always be pushed to near the very end whenever a new chapter is released (the newest chapter will be on top always to notify readers of new chapters).
Right now, I have questions as follows:
1. What do you think about the two main characters (Eugene and Melodi) so far? Do you think they are interesting enough characters?
2. Is the litRPG elements in this world adequate? So the status screens and stats doesn't equate to this world being a 'game'; it's just that Soulbound Companions are able to quantify the power of Flair users and turn them into stats. This is my first ever attempt at writing a story with litRPG elements, and I'm in dire need of some feedback.
3. How's the general prose? Is it funny enough to be worth the tag 'Comedy' or should I remove it? Are the fighting scenes good?
I do have a general storyline plotted out, but I don't want to ask questions regarding plot just yet. When we hit about 10 chapters, I'll start gathering feedback.
I'd love to hear your thoughts. Thank you!
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From The Strongest Job of Dragon Knight, To The Beginner Job Carrier, Somehow, The Heroes are Depending on Me
Axel Granz, the strongest dragon knight of them all has switched his job to become a beginner carrier. Relieved that he can finally take off his legendary dragon knight’s helmet and escape the responsibilities of an elite S-class worker, Axel eagerly starts his new, low-class job!
8 378Incomplete
DON'T READ THIS! WELL IF YOU WANT TO YOU CAN, BUT DON'T SAY I DIDN'T WARN YOU! I LEAVE IT HERE AS A REMINDER TO MYSELF. MAYBE, ONE DAY, I WILL REWRITE IT, THOUGH IT WILL BE A COMPLETELY DIFFERENT STORY! After the Hero, Olympius, son of God, defeated the Demon King and uncovered his evil plot of infiltrating humanity with demons, the world returned to balance. People could live in peace again, not having to worry if their lives were in constant danger. But after a long time, darkness started brewing again in the world. A shade that this time, they created themselves. P.S. It's my first novel, so I welcome any critique, and if you find any grammar mistakes and if you can find motivation in you to inform me of those, please do! ;)
8 444Slave 53: The Phoenix
Azgarth is a violent Warlord from a planet where everyone feared him, a man that never lost a battle whether it be from his enemies surrendering or dying. After entering a wormhole, this once infamous man had his memory completely wiped. He was enslaved under the name 53. The great comet arrived one day and gave 53 an extremely rare animal aspect, the Phoenix. Having a rare animal aspect puts people on the fast track to power in this world. Will 53 show the same brutality as his former self? Author: So there will probably be a lot of changes when I start hashing out the whole classes and what not. I'm not planning on this to have statuses or anything like that, but when people 'lvl up' is probably going to be something like ascending 1, 2, 3, etc. With each ascension they are many times stronger, for example, someone who hasn't ascend at all would be at 0, but someone with a 1 would be about 5x stronger than someone who is 0 and so on. It would take a long time to reach each one. With the red colored marks which represents fire, I have a couple ideas with what I want to do, in a way a battle royale, as this continent they are on isn't very large, but all four elements are on it (or more, I might add light, dark, and some others) but all the humans have red, while a different alien race has blue (water), brown (earth), and grey (Air). The color of the mark they have influences how they feel about each other, a example of that would be if a red saw a brown, then they would naturally feel a disgust about each other, and if they killed someone from a different color they would gain way more life essence which is needed to ascend than they would killing someone from their same color. The last thing, I'm not too sure about the main character yet, as I like the whole idea of a memory wipe, I almost think it'd be more entertaining to have the guy slowly regain all his memory, then just becoming his normal self again. If that's the case I'll have to change the title of book. The original idea was this guy would keep the name 53, and his prior self named Azgarth is sharing his body, as in he can talk to him and give him advice on things since he doesn't want him to die since he is sorta like a split personality sharing the same body. Looking at it now, idk if I want this guy to be named 53 forever. Warning: A lot of dark content in the book, especially in the flashbacks.
8 77The Unwilling Game Tester
Summary: Detective Nova was investigating a Prank Call Case with the help of his friend Malcolm. The problem arised when all the clues were pointed towards the secret gaming group named "Underground Gaming" where only a handful of players are invited to play. It started to get dangerous when he found himself trapped on the game itself. ------------------------------------------------- This is a work of fiction. All the characters or technology appearing in this are all imaginary. Any resemblance to actual persons, living or dead, business establishments, events or location is entirely coincidental. ------------------------------------------------ Changed it to its original title. Made a temporary Cover -Dee
8 166Growing Wings
Standing between demons dominating the entire continent lays a nation filled with fighters who pride themselves on keeping the evil at bay. Demon hunting is a lucrative and revered profession. Xellie wishes to become a hunter feared by demons, helping clean up the world. Motivated partly by wanting to save lives, partly by money, but mostly wanting to prove herself to her brother, Niko - a famous demon hunter partnered with an equally famous exorcist.It's a simple mantra to live by. Demons are bad. People who summon demons are also bad. It can't be complicated, can it?
8 206Unbeknownst Tragedy [Classroom of the Elite]
[The White Room] She shall die. He shall not react. Why? Because he is unbeknownst to such Tragedy. [Classroom of the Elite]
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