《A healthy mind in a healthy body》Review answer.
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So, the last reviewer complained about two things about the MC and I feel they may come from a difference in denomination. But first things first, thanks for the review, you rock.
First cursing, in the Catholic Church cursing is not forbidden. The only curses that can't be said are those that utter the name of God in vain or other sacred things, such as the sacred host. Any other restrictions on cursing are because of politeness, not religious concerns. I may be wrong for some places, but where I live that is how it is and if I am wrong no priest has ever taken offence, and I have cursed in front of priests. So no, cursing does not make one a bad catholic.
Second, what do you do on Sunday. According to that reviewer you spend all day in prayer, I guess? According to my life experience you go to mass and rest. Because it is a day of rest. So you perform sacraments and rest, and sacraments do not take long so you are left with a lot of free time for resting. Did I stress resting enough? Because even the Lord rested that day.
Finally, I don't know much about modern monks, but that is irrelevant in this story. He isn't a modern monk, he isn't even a medieval monk. He was frozen before St. Anthony of Egypt, Father of All Monks, that's actually one of his titles, died and is older than St. Pachomicus, founder of cenobitic monasticism. Also known as communal monasticism. While I haven't been able to find much about eremitic monks, I do know they weaved baskets for bread on early Christianity and worked as ferrymen in medieval times and the completely retired from society. As far as I'm aware they didn't even need to make vows on Gaius' times. So he fulfills both requirements, working for his food and retiring.
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And even then he is no longer a monk. Monks live how they do because that is their vocation, that which they feel compelled to live like, their way of life, the best way for them to achieve a fulfilling life. A vocation, I can't stress that enough. Gaius became an eremitic monk to achieve a healthier mental state through eremitic life, religious study and experience and time. He succeeded, and it would be an insult to monks everywhere to keep living like that if it isn't his vocation, which it isn't. His monk life was more akin to tales of medieval knights living in convents as a way to atone for some sin, in Gaius' case for his potential for sin. He achieved it, and like those knights he went back to the world, and thus he is secular. He wasn't even ordained in his time, because they weren't ordained in that time (I may be wrong about this). As such he can, and indeed must (because it is not his vocation) live a secular life.
And the last thing is that's just because I don't explicitly say it doesn't mean he doesn't pray, read the bible, bless his food, go to mass, confess or any other facets of secular catholic life. He does, I just don't say it because it seemed obvious to me. Maybe I have to revise the chapters and include it, but I think I can only write 'he recited a Hail Mary' or 'he read the Book of Samuel', or 'he went to mass before returning and beginning to spend the day with Akai, incidentally he confessed that day' so many times before it grows annoying. Indeed, I write so that everyone, be they Christian, atheist, agnostic, or even Muslim, can enjoy it and that requires for me to make it accessible, even if that means I can't just overdose the book with religious references. Trust me, religious worldbuilding is for Son of the Archangel, not this one. And I certainly don't intend to write a book on how to be a good Christian, I leave that to priests and missionaries that know much more than I do and spend years studying it. I consider this story to be light on worldbuilding, something simple for me to learn the ropes.
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I want to stress that I'm not attacking the reviewer, I just wanted to explain something that seemed to be misunderstood. I still appreciate the review I just don't think these two thigs he complains about are legitimate.
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