《Adventurer - Sunrise Over Sunset》Repost Changelog - Edits and additions
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Larger Edit Goals -
1. Humanize the MC, provide more insight into his decisions, motivations, fears, and goals.
2. Improve paragraph and chapter structure.
3. Improve immersion, change the overall tone of the narrative.
4. More showing, less telling.
5. Overall flow and readibility polish
Specific Changes-
1. Increased visibility on Cire's struggle with his desire for blood and losing control.
2. Increased Cire's general intelligence when making decisions, both short term and long term.
3. Changed how he spent or did not spend his skill points throughout the work.
4. Provided visibility to the experience gains through out the story and improved all of the math relating to experience gain.
5. Increased the potency of the Bite skill to provide more experience when used.
6. Changed the internal dialogue to be in italics. Removed all italics not related to world updates or internal dialogue.
7. Increased visibility on the effect of Cire's Charisma stat's effect on others.
8. Changed names from middle/old English origins to ancient Greek origins. Samuel to Eugene. Leslie to Stacy. Etc.
9. Changed all skill gain flavor text to ancient Greek quotations. These are all accurately attributed to their authors and are not fictional.
Added Content-
1. New conversation between Eugene and Stacy regarding Cire.
2. New story on how Eugene and Stacy met.
3. Improved island description.
4. Small details to the hamlet, its residents, and the surrounding area.
5. Changed the last battle scene to Durg and Selene's perspective.
6. Over 5,000 additional words spread throughout the narrative.
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Tension permeates the city of Bleakridge as forces within its walls struggle for supremacy. Grim Thorne, the disinherited son of the Earl, is a fly caught in the web of power struggles between these forces. When Grim closes his eyes, he can still see the bodies piled high from the first day of occupation. The day he was branded a bastard in the southern fashion. The day his father let them. Soldiers from the south bearing green cloaks and royal seals maintain order in the streets of Bleakridge, ensuring that the lifeblood of commerce continues to flow through the port city. In the slums beyond the outer wall, the Sons of the Reaper lurk. Some call them heroes, others villains. But all fear them for their relentless devotion to the old ways and the freedom that entails. In the castle above the city, resides the Earl of Bleakridge. The man who bent the knee and saved the lives of his people, if not their souls. After twenty years of occupation, the tension is coming to a head and Grim has to choose. Sympathetic to the Sons, duty bound to his father, and forced into service to the king. He must rise above the brand on his neck and decide where his true loyalties lie. But, after so long, it can be hard to tell who is deserving of loyalty. The King’s men who enforce order with a blood-soaked iron fist? The Sons who more resemble terrorists and crime lords than revolutionaries? Or the father who watches the bloodshed and does nothing? In the end, it is always the place of the young to bear the sins of the old.
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