《Empire of Night》Question for you Guys
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Hey guys!
Sorry this isn't an actual update, but I wanted to get my readers' opinions on something before I settle back into things.
While I was recovering from my back issue, I went back through and read EoN through from beginning to end and took quite a few notes along the way. The long and short of it is I have the current draft written through to the end. The Write-a-thon was a pretty big help in that regard, but I've noticed quite a few things I want to implement and tighten up in the story. I compared my own notes to your guys' comments and have a clear map of what I'd like to implement.
My main question is, would you guys prefer that I keep going with this current draft as planned or prefer an, in my opinion, improved story before the chaos that is the last third of the story? I think it would take me about three weeks to get everything settled as far as story improvements go, if I go the route of rewrites.
I know I can be a bit of a perfectionist and that can definitely hinder more than help me 90% of the time. I'm totally fine forging ahead, if that is what you guys would prefer and I can always rewrite after everything is said and done with the current draft. Rewrites can be a pain, especially for long time readers.
I mainly want to do right by you guys while also improving the story.
Thanks for listening to my ramblings!
- A very tired Sven
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