《Delicate as Glass》Original chapters comments and critique
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If you'd like to read the original version of Delicate as Glass, then comment or send me a PM, and I'll reply as soon as I can with reading info. The old opening is pretty bad, which is why you'll see critical comments below. They helped me forge the story into something better, so I appreciate them all. Thanks for the honesty!
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