1) What did you think the book was about?

Just Go With It is a story about Megan. It follows her and her new crush, Noah. Megan isn't feeling her current boyfriend, but she is digging Noah. It's a story that tells how these two get together. At least that's what I got from reading the first five chapters.

2) Did you feel that the book fulfilled your expectations?

I didn't have many expectations for this story. But I didn't expect it to start in the way it did. I expected a heated chase or game of cat and mouse. I didn't expect Megan to already be sort what of an expert at flirting.

3) What about the plot? Did it pull you in; or did you feel you had to force yourself to read the book?

I felt that I had to force myself to read Just Go With It. It started off in a very common way a high school story would. The plot doesn't get exciting until after chapter 4 when the two main characters actually have a face to face flirty conversation (I'm not counting their mini conversation in the three chapter.

4) Do the characters seem real and believable? (Basically, can you relate to their predicaments? To what extent do they remind you of yourself or someone you know, if they do at all?)

I can't say I relate Megan because I wasn't the party type, but I can say she is sort of a believable character. I do find it slightly unbelievable that she suppressed her wild self when with her boyfriend. If the author had of shown she did some of the same stuff she used to back in high school I could have accepted it. She basically waits until her boyfriend is gone on a golf trip to get wild. To me, I'll say she would still be a wildish person when her boyfriend is present.

5) How was the pacing of the chapters you read?

The pacing was ok to me. It read nicely. I just didn't like some aspects of the story. Nevertheless, it has a lot of potential.

6) How was the description of the chapters you read?

The main issue with this story is that it tells a lot instead of showing the scenes in the first few chapters.

7) Describe what you liked or disliked about the writer's style? (Why?)

I like that the flow was easy to read through. Like reading through was easy with the word choice the author chooses. I disliked the beginning chapter. It started with an alarm going off instead of when she first bumped into Noah.

8) Would you read more of the author's work?

The writer's strongest: I think you did pretty good with the details. I understood everything perfectly.

The writer's weakest writing trait: I don't think you gave enough sensual descriptions as the story heavily relates on sensual descriptions.

Help request: I thought your summary was on point. It was fine to me.

Overall personal thoughts: I feel that this story has a lot of potential. It just needs to start in the middle of the action before moving into the backstory.

~Ellen

Your story has a lot of potential. The pacing is decent and the storyline flows well. The steamy scenes are nice and I am glad that the MCs don't cross the line until the BF is out of the picture. Now for some things that you can hopefully use to improve your work and take it to the next level.

Right off the bat, in chapter one, there is a problem with tense changing. You flip back and forth from present to past tense, so keep an eye out for that. It is pretty rampant with tenses changing mid-sentence in some parts. There are also a lot of grammatical errors. All that can be addressed with a good editing session.

I'd like to know why you italicize all the dialogue? I was honestly confused by that. Typically, italics are reserved to denote internal speech or to emphasize something of importance. There were also way too many uses of ellipses in places that weren't appropriate. Again, those are grammar issues. It could also do with some better formatting i.e. shorter paragraphs, making dialogue its own paragraph. In fiction writing, a paragraph can be one sentence. So don't be afraid to use the enter button. In general, especially on WP, shorter paragraphs are easier to read.

All these things really disrupted my reading in some places and took me out of the story making it hard to get through. Other than that it was just hard for me to relate to the characters, but not everyone will and that doesn't mean you're a bad writer. I'm probably not your target audience anyway as this is a new adult book. I believe you will only improve as you go and I would certainly read more of your work in the future. Best of luck and keep writing! ♡

~Clarity

The story is about Megan that suddenly falls out of love in his boyfriend Christian. Then later find interest to Noah who also shares the same feeling. The plot and concept are actually nice, it is written in a way like the Author is talking to her reader.

In reading three chapters, I'm glad that they don't jump on each other easily but rather start to tease which is good to develop more attraction before jumping into the fire.:)

The aggressiveness really fit for calling this an erotic story. The description is also nice and you can picture it naturally. And it is not so hard to understand, all is fit to the idea she wants to display. I will definitely be going to continue reading it :)

~Ariane

I read fourteen chapters. The blurb needs a little editing, especially concerning the missing commas. I had to read some sentences twice to understand them. Adding the correct punctuation would definitely help with the flow and make me want to read the book a little more. The blurb gave me an accurate idea of what this book is about, though: Girls meets boy, and sparks fly. And fly they did. The two had great chemistry and were cute and hot together! Good job on describing that.

The flow overall was okay. What put me off was the formatting though. Why did you put all dialogue in italics? And sometimes it was confusing who said what as there wasn't an actual dialogue tag but the reaction of another person. There were grammar issues like time switches, and some of the paragraphs were really long.

The plot was okay, didn't pull me in 100% though. I was cringing at Megan's attitude when they went to that party because she did have a boyfriend still, even though she was sure she would break up with him. I'm glad that it occurred to her at some point, though, and that she didn't hook up with anyone. And I think she should have broken up 'properly' with her ex before she started kissing Noah. All that made me not like her much. And I found her pushy best friend, who kept telling her she needed to hook up, a little annoying to be honest. I loved Noah, he was a nice, sweet, and hot character – until he disappeared on her. I get that he was scared, but that was just a dick move. That made me a little mad at him. Luckily, he made up for it. The further I read, the more the characters came across as a little immature. I'm not sure if I'm thinking that because I'm way past those college years (which I never attended either) and have no idea about what college students are like. Maybe you painted a pretty good picture.

Even though you try to explain how they never ran into each other, it seemed a little unrealistic, especially when they seemed so into each other at first sight.

The writing style was good. There was a more telling rather than showing, though. Avoid too much of the words see, hear, feel, or watch/look at him/her. For example, don't say 'I could hear her whisper', but 'She whispered'.

It was great that you mentioned the issue of protection, even if it was after the deed ;)

Even though the story is a little predictable, with some editing, it could be really good.

~Lilly

When I read the blurb I figured this was a story about a girl that's bored in her relationship and cheats with someone new and more exciting. I was wrong. There was no cheating.

The plot was interesting as I couldn't figure out why she stayed with the guy. Also, I continued reading because I wanted to know more about the wild past the author kept mentioning.

The characters are believable. However, not really relatable for me. The story moves at a reasonable pace. I like that the author evokes emotions. I've felt outraged on behalf of Megan at least twice. I've also felt Noah's rage and confusion over his budding feelings.

As it relates to the blurb a little reworking can generate more interest. For example:

Megan and Christian have been together since high school. Now In college, their love is stronger than ever... or is it.

I like details. Especially in the sex chapters. I would read more of this author's work.

~CSuigar

You have a really great solid foundation to this story. The book flows nicely and the descriptions to the chapters are great. But there are a few things you need to address.

You have major grammatical errors that don't necessarily disrupt the flow of reading every time, but sometimes it does.

Proofread for punctuation mistakes. You have a lot of run-on sentences. Sentences that don't have periods instead of commas, and continue almost into a complete paragraph. When you have a character speak in the middle of a paragraph you don't have quotations around what they are saying.

Also, some of your paragraphs could be broken up into two different paragraphs. In a few, there are two or three completely different points you are trying to get across all rolled into one half page paragraph. It would help the readers flow if you broke them up.

Watch out for changing tense. I noticed in several chapters you would start out in first person then switch to she and her. Even when yours still in the main female characters POV.

I'm going to leave you with the same advice a few people gave me on my own book, look into getting an editor!

Keep it up, and I hope this helps!

~Callie

I think the description aptly described what the story was going to be about. A college girl who had not realized she wasn't satisfied with her relationship until "he" showed up.

The book did fulfill my expectations in the story and I did not feel like I had to force myself to read it.

The characters are totally relatable to people that I knew in college and the situations are certainly familiar although I suspect I was a lot tamer than she was based on what was described of her in high school.

The chapters were a good place and there were not huge gaps or out of sync time lapses.

The writer did a good job with descriptives and the flow of the story. Grammar was good, I didn't notice any glaring issues with structure or run on sentences.

I would read further works of this author.

~CC

Ok so to answer your question about the summary I didn't love it. If I had gone just off The summery I might have taken a pass but let me tell you I'm glad I didn't because I read every last chapter.

This book was so good that I finished it in like 2 days. I loved the characters and that's not an easy feat. Even when the ex goes nuts her response was relatable and Noah's response was relatable. I found myself saying "Yeah, I could totally see this happening in real life."

I can't tell you how to change your summary because that isn't a strength of mine. I can only speak to what I felt when I read it. When I'm reading summaries I'm looking to see what kind of experience am I going to get? That's hard for me to quantify so I'll just say that you have a gem here. Your book is amazing and I can't wait for what comes next from you.

~Catherine

Not gonna lie, this really wasn't my cup of tea. I couldn't get myself to like Megan or Noah. Maybe it's because in my eyes sex is the least important part of a relationship, but I just could not relate to either of them. Also, it felt like it had some pacing issues, namely that it felt rushed. But with all that being said, I bet others loved it, it just wasn't for me.

~Medula

The help request seemed to focus on the summary, so I think I will start there. I didn't mind the summary.

Did it accurately represent the story? I'm not entirely sure. I think that a little rewording might help to make it more reflective of what actually happens. For example, it starts off explaining that Megan has a boyfriend that she has been with for a while, then goes on to explain later that she meets Noah (I like all the stuff between that, by the way). I feel like adding in something about the fact that Megan is just waiting to break up with her boyfriend might help the summary better match the story.

Another suggestion I have is reducing your use of ellipses (...) in the summary and the text in general. Your words should be adding all of the drama and suspense they need, without having to use ellipses. In some cases, just starting a new paragraph would have the same effect and make your writing seem much smoother. In others, they are just unnecessary.

Now, for some more general comments on the formatting and grammar in the story. I personally find the fact that all dialogue is in italics to be very disruptive. It is probably also a lot of extra work for you. Leaving it as normal text is fine, especially as you have all the quotation marks in the right places anyway. I would save the italics for the characters internal thoughts because there are a couple of places where it is hard to tell the difference between the narrative voice and the protagonists' internal thoughts. I had to reread several spots because of this.

I will admit being very biased on this next part of feedback but using numerals rather than words is a pet peeve of mine. For example, if Megan had two shoes, it looks more polished if you write "two shoes" rather than "2 shoes".

Ok, so I feel that so far you must be thinking I disliked everything. That isn't true at all. Despite the grammatical and formatting things, which are all very easy fixes, I found the story interesting. I loved how Megan's voice came through in the text, and it was very easy to get a good sense of who she was early in the piece. Even with the very socially-questionable concerns some might have about her getting so flirty before she had broken up with Christian, I think you did a good job of showing why. Admittedly, she was very quick and out-there with Noah, but hey- go for it girl.

The relationship between Noah and Megan is sweet to see. I really think your title is perfect, given the content of the novel. I love how they dance around things for a while. So many people just rush straight to sex without giving it time to build. Overall, you've done an excellent job narrating the story. Thank you for sharing.

~Liv