In 'Perfect 10' by Jumping_Jiminys, humanity has finally fucked up completely: In the year 2500, the air on Earth has become toxic, forcing humanity to live in domes. A kind of replacement for oxygen was found, allowing humanity to live, but it *does* change humans, altering their appearance in some cases. In this world, main character Everen is on the run from the authorities, until a girl falling from a glass ceiling abducts him and brings him to a place of rebellion in which he must do his best to survive.

I, for one, think that's a pretty cool premise. In a world with little oxygen, in which some people have access to it and some don't, there are doubtlessly many stories to tell. The dystopia/rebellion thing is a common trope, but the interesting world and the thought that went into creating it makes up for that!

One of the strengths of this story, in my opinion, is that it has quite a few gripping action scenes, especially in the first chapters, in which protagonist Everen is on the run. The adrenaline is palpable in those, and they immediately raise questions on _why_ exactly Everen is fleeing. This habit of raising questions continues throughout the story and serves as a great incentive to keep readers reading, so good job!

A weakness however, is Everen, our main character. Certain aspects of him are executed well for sure: his past is fascinating, and so are his relationships with the people around him, like, for example, his mother (in flashbacks). But his personality kind of… lacks. It feels like he's going through the motions rather than being a well-developed part of his story; I can see what he _does_, but I don't often read about his emotions or inner thoughts. My suggestion would be to aim for more balance between action, emotion, and inner thought to enrich his character.

That way, the scene in which he ends up with the mysterious rebel organization, for example, would be much more fascinating; right now, that scene feels a bit flat. Everen's there, he's kind of weirded out, but he doesn't even ask that many questions regarding where he is, why he's there, etc. It seemed like he mostly just complied and rolled with it. But what did he _feel_ when he was confronted with all these new people and experiences? What thoughts were rushing through his head? I, as the reader, don't know. But I _want_ to know. So tell me!

While the story flows well and doesn't suffer from many spelling and grammar mistakes, the punctuation needs quite some work, especially in the later chapters. Commas are a thing. So are periods. I encountered a myriad of run-on sentences that made the story more difficult to comprehend; I'd recommend an extra round of editing to at least filter those out!

This story, like pretty much every story out there, has its highs and lows. My rating for it is: 6.5! Not bad!