'Kaderra Academy' by StoryWriterKato is about Nathan (Nate), a crown prince who's starting at Kaderra Academy, a (magical) combat school. When he finds himself competing in a fighting tournament against other schools with a bunch of friends, he gets more than he bargained for.

It's not the most original plot, but it could be interesting when executed well. However, I found it a bit lacking in certain aspects. The battles are cool and the weaponry and powers were intriguing, but I'd have liked a more in-depth explanations on them. Now we just sort of… have them disappear out of the blue, which is kind of strange, especially since they're in a school, because that presents you with the perfect opportunity to introduce all these cool concepts you've come up with! That would also give a more accurate representation of daily life at Kaderra Academy, because I've seen surprisingly little of that. What are the classes? What about homework? What is being taught and why? World building! There's untapped potential!

The characters are nice. They're diverse in personalities, though some seem less developed than others, and their friendships and personal relationships are fun to read about. Luke is a best boy, in my personal opinion, and he and Nate are cute together, though I think there could have been more build-up, more foreshadowing. Luke is painted primarily as a seemingly straight womanizer in the first chapter, and the switch to totally gay for Nate seems rather… sudden?

Which brings me to the bonus chapters. Author, you've stated that you liked exploring other characters' point of view. So why use bonus chapters? They're nice, but they distract from the story a little, and you could easily write a story with multiple characters' point of view. It would also help developing more characters. And let's say you did only two points of view, Nate's and Luke's… it would definitely help with the buildup to their relationship.

The GPS is decent. Grammar and spelling seem to be fine, but the punctuation could use tweaking. For example, you do NOT need a period after a question mark. You just don't. Fix that, at least.

All in all, with some tweaking, it will be a cool and entertaining story.

Rating: 7.5