'clover king.' by sfeiten

Hey! It's poetry! Neat!

Let's get down to business. I'd like to start out with this: I love the vibe of this book, the aesthetic, the energy! It has a sense of maturity to it that I often don't find in Wattpad's poetic repertoire. I think it's the skilful use of language that does the trick here; it's really well done.

The style of the 9 poems this book contains actually reminds me of classic poetry. I take Latin as a class in school, which results in me having translated quite some ancient poetry: Ovid, Virgil, Catullus (interesting guy. Look him up at your own risk). And if I'm honest, I'm seeing some similarities there. Like classic poetry, the poems in this story have long sentences, many fancy words, adjectives all around, interesting comparisons, sentences you need to read twice before you can even begin to comprehend its true essence. And I like that style, I really do. It has the ability to make this look almost professional, intentional or not.

Something I liked less was how the poems got a little repetitive. Not in terms of theme; while all poems were about some kind of love, they remained interesting. However, I've seen comparisons to Zeus' lightning bolt and the eruption of Mount Vesuvius appear at least twice, and unless you're obviously using repetetion as a literary tool… it kind of loses its charm. I've also found multiple instances of 'you could've used a less fancy word and the poem would still be good'. Seriously, though. Every time someone uses 'orbs' when they mean 'eyes', a piece of my soul withers away.

I also thought the poems could look more pleasing. Unless it's a conscious style choice, I'd recommend capitalizing 'i's' and starting sentences with a capital letter too. Those big chunks of text we have now could also be divided into smaller blocks, I think. Don't change it if it's simply part of your style, but it would make the poetry easier to read.

I also loved how there seemed to be a dark undertone in every poem. Not in the edgy way I so often see here, but a more subtle melancholy, an underlying darkness creeping into you. I thirst for that, my friends, fuck yes I do. Give me all thay artfully masked edge. I'm a fan of that content and I think it was really done well in this case.

It's short, but an experience nonetheless!

Rating: 9.5!