《Book reviews *Requests Closed*》'Beyond The Veil' by cool_reader_
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Elizabeth Scottson can see the future in her dreams.
Yes, you heard that right. Does she have a special connection with the television too, so she can watch Spongebob to cheer her up when life becomes a little harsh? I sure hope for her that she does, because life simply isn't fun when your weird future-visions start prophesizing your bloody murder. What do you do when you know you'll be murdered? Well, you're gonna do everything in your power to make sure the bastard's put behind bars.
I really liked the concept of this, but the plot gets kind of wonky pretty fast. I mean, Maxon comes out of nowhere (there should've been buildup, really), and so do Elizabeth's murdered 'friends'. Cool, girls getting killed off, but why do we only learn that they were apparently good friends of Elizabeth after they're killed, despite them never being mentioned before. People don't give a fuck about the death of a character they can't get to know. And, to be honest, I don't think detective Ricosta should've believed Elizabeth's vision story so easily; detectives tend to be rather skeptical when it comes to the supernatural.
Like I mentioned before, the characters seem to come out of nowhere, and they disappear as quickly too. Aside from Elizabeth and Detective Ricosta, it kind of feels like most characters have been introduced without having a purpose. For example, Annie is the best friend, neat, but why do we barely see her? Why is she mentioned so rarely while she's important enough to be noticed at the same time? Give the characters and their appearances a purpose, and for the love of god, more screen time! Readers barely care about characters they never get to know!
The GPS is just fine, so no pointers for that. That's a win.
The story is interesting and has potential, but it has some plot holes and character issues to be fixed.
Rating: 6
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