'Reflection' is about Sairen wolves who are tasked with protecting hunanity from Avros, dark creatures. The story follows a Sairen wolf named Lorraine, who is somehow different from her peers.

I wasn't too impressed with the plot. It was the umpteenth time I've seen a wolf story, white wolves being special is a cliché at this point, and honestly? Wolf stories can be good, but I don't remember there being anything that really made the story stand out.

I was confused about the plot and characters too, which isn't something that usually happens to me. It was like concepts and characters would be introduced and there'd be not near enough explanation as who/what they were, what happened to them, what the hell they were doing for the story…. There are two possible explanations for this, because I know myself, and me not knowing what the fuck's going on in this particular story doesn't stem from my own incompetence or stupidity.

1. The story wasn't written well enough to give the reader a clear view as to where the story is going, what is happening, and who is who.

2. I have failed to pay enough attention to comprehend fully what's taking place, which means the events unfolding were just plain uninteresting.

Most about what goes for the plot goes for the characters too. From what I've seen, most of them seem to be static archetypes, like the runt, for example, who doesn't seem to have much going for himself than 'I want to prove myself to the pack'. I also frequently found myself wondering, 'who is this, what is this, how the hell are they important to the story?' The cast was also rather large, and, in my opinion, many of its members haven't been as developed as they could be.

I believe the mistake made here, is that the author forgot that we, the audience, do not have all the backstory and knowledge of the story that they themself possess. While everything might make sense to them, the writing doesn't reflect all that which makes sense, if you catch my drift. This results in a situation in which the author thinks, 'oh, what a comprehensible story!', while the reader is left with 'it could be good but I have no idea what I just read'.

The GPS is decent, but like most stories here it needs more editing, especially regarding punctuation. I'll show you an example of an annoying issue in need of fixing:

"Get out." Lorraine said.

That's incorrect. When something is being said, you use a comma:

"Get out," Lorraine said.

But! If there's an action, you can a period.

"Get out." Lorraine smirked as she said those words.

See what I mean? Sticking to those simple rules make the story so much more readable, and it might help lift away some existing confusions.

On a more positive note, I do want to say that the story has potential. I believe there's been genuine intention to write a good story, and the work itself would definitely become more enjoyable when its flaws are sweeped away. This painfully honest review may have shed some light on existing issues, and I do hope it is received as constructive criticism that can be worked with, instead of as the mindless ramblings of a negative idiot.

Rating: 5