《Book reviews *Requests Closed*》#9: 'Forsaken blood' by OneLessFantasy
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'Forsaken blood' is a fantasy story that can be found on the account @OneLessFantasy. I'm saying account because the account is shared by @aishalam and @hareem_atif. I'm guessing they also write the book together.
Enough about that, let's review it! The book is about Princess Charlotte and her cousin Lady Rochelle, two women who face the pros and cons of royal life. This, of course, brings the necessary problems along. It reminds me of other medieval fantasy stories and shows, like Merlin.
The characters are great. Charlotte and rochelle are both interesting to follow as well as the people in their lives. They had a sense of humour too, which is something I can really appreciate.
The first few chapters of the story bored me a little, so I didn't get my hopes up for this book, but I was proven wrong. The book gets better and more interesting with every chapter, both in story and in characters.
Grammar and spelling is really good too. Things are described really well and I think it's really written nice. Comma's are still important though; I missed them sometimes (not "okay okay calm down", but "okay, okay, calm down.")
There are some medieval fantasy clichés, but let's face it, every story has those. I think they're done well in this story.
Lastly, there is a thing about pictures being used throughout the book. This isn't a bad thing, in fact, it helps set the scene. The thing is, overusing them breaks the flow of the story, so watch out for that, okay?
Rating: 8!
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