《Book reviews *Requests Closed*》#4: 'complicated love' by BadAssPinguin
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hello good people who read this!
Today, I'm happy to announce the first fanfic review in this book! Complicated love!
This fanfic is a Bts fanfic, Bts standing for Bangtan Boys, a South Korean boyband.
I had never heard of 'em before. I'm like Patrick fricking star. I live under a rock.
(I did look them up and listened to their songs before reading; I think their music is really good, so go check them out!)
Seeing as I'm not that familiar with Bts and its members, I might not be able to write an good review. Please bear with me.
So the story is about Lalisa, a girl who moves in with her internet friend, Park Jimin, a member of Bts. I never hear any of the band members sing or mention their careers, so I'm guessing this is an AU.
Like I said, I don't know much about Bts, so I can't say if you got their personalities right. I do know that some minor characters (Angel, Bora), felt a little weird. Angel was a bit of a cliché and Bora felt unbelievable. Would the average person really do that in real life?
BadAssPinguin, the author of this story, is Dutch, like me, but the book is written in English. The grammar and spelling are really good, few mistakes here and there, but seriously, a lot of Dutch people are bad at English spelling and grammar.
Heck, a lot of Dutch people are bad at Dutch spelling and grammar.
TIME FOR TIPS!
Lalisa was an OC, I guess, and she was just your normal OC. Not too cliché, not too memorable.... she could use some extras? A little more personality?
The "OC moves in with band members" thing has been done before. Using an overused plot isn't that bad, but again, maybe something extra? Something to make the book stand out in a sea of other books?
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Another thing: the band members all introduce themselves like this.
"Hi, I'm Hoseok!"
"I'm Namjoon."
"Hello, I'm Jungkook, pleasure to meet you!"
All in the same chapter, in a big introduction round.
Introduction rounds are generally a big no for me, but I always see it in band fanfics. The other band members are always introduced like this, and sometimes they even... fade from the story when they're not important anymore. So maybe give introduce the members in a more original way?
Lastly, another cliché band fanfic thingy: the fandom jokes.
Every fandom has a running gag (or more than one!), a long-running joke.
I saw the 'stolen jams' thing, decided to look it up, and I was right: running gag. (Correct me if I'm wrong)
If you see a particular thing being used in every fanfic in your fandom, don't use it. I recognized this as an overused joke and I didn't even know Bts.
This happens in a lot of band fics, by the way. I almost everyone.
I rate this book: a 6.5!
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