The first review in this book, is the review for wattpad user @maudjeah.

This book is written in Dutch, so if you don't speak that language, you won't be able to read it. Sorry? But I did hear that an English translation might be on the way, so you can stick around.

Anyway, I barely read Dutch books on Wattpad, so this was a nice change.

The book's cover is a creepy picture of a girl/ human creature with black eyes. I sincerely hope you didn't think it would have blue eyes, because then you haven't been paying attention to the title, which is captivating. The title is one that makes you at least want to read what the book is about, so that's a good thing.

The book is about this girl named Sally and her friend Tim, who encounter a strange creature in the woods. Try to guess the genre of the book. Hint: it isn't comedy.

IT'S HORROR!!!

I apologize, I just like horror stories and overreacted.

So the story is a horror story, and now I'll start to review the story itself.

Please keep in mind that I'm just offering constructive criticism and am not trying to offend you or hurt you're feelings. You're also completely free to ignore my advice.

The 'creature in the woods' thing has been done before. The cliché isn't necessarily a bad thing, but it would've been nice if this creature got more 'screen time'. The story felt more like a love story, with the creature staring at Sally and Tim through the window, basically being like this:

So in my opinion, there was a lot of untapped potential regarding the creature. So many things can be done with creepy creatures! Use that to your advantage!

Also, I'm not sure if the creature should've been killed as soon as it did. The creature died fairly quick, just by being stabbed a few times? With scissors? Again, the untapped potential. Make the protagonists struggle! Make them suffer!

Making protagonists suffer is always good, by the way. It makes them a little more likeable.

Second thing: grammar and punctuation. I'm a real grammar nazi. If the grammar in a book is not good, I will stop reading it. Dutch Wattpad books rarely have good grammar and punctuation. I stopped reading them because they made me cringe so hard.

Black Eyes does contain quite a lot of grammar mistakes, but I've definitely seen worse around here. You could try to look through your book again and see if you can find some mistakes? It's never too late for extra editing!

Now look at me, telling people to edit their books while I'm still telling myself to edit my old fanfics and am still procrastinating.

MOVING ON.

Punctuation is as important as grammar. I think it was pretty well done in this story, but I have one other word: comma.

Y'know, those thingies: ,,,,,,

There were rarely commas in the story. This might be a thing that only bothers autistic perfectionists like me, but still. Commas are important, they exist to make the writing easier to understand. So commas. I think the story would improve a lot if it had more commas.

On a more positive note, I liked how there were drawings of the main characters in the first chapters. It made it easier to picture them, and I think maudjeah draws really good!

If I had to rate Black eyes on a scale from 1 to 10, one being the lowest and ten the highest, I think I'd give it a 6.5.

I think that's it for now! Once again, you can just ignore everything I say if you want to, and if I've hurt your feelings, please tell me so I can apologize.

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