Hi, my name is Katie Sally Jane Beauty Olivia Super Pink Girly Beauty Infinity Wow This Is A Long Name Makeup Mascara, and I'm sooooooooooouseless. I can't do anything! Well, except sing, cook, be pretty, fly, turn invisible, be perfect, make unicorns with laser eyes, and change into any color.

I woke up in my extremely plush 10 foot bed, and thought, Ugh why does my step dad hate me? Lol Makeup Time, YEAH

I stood up, and applied my makeup flawlessly. My blonde hair flew in the nonexistent wind, and my flawless skin shined in the moonlight, and my eyes sparkled in the sun. The stars complimented me.

Why does Aphrodite hate me? I'm soo ugly. Oops not supposed to know about the gods yet.

Then my stepdad came up to me and punched me as hard as he could, and my face remained the same. Then Percy Jackson sliced him into bits. Then My stepdad slapped me in the face.

"WHY DO U HATE ME," I saided.

"BECUZ ANNABETH CHASE IS WAAAY BTTER SO LIKE LOL GURL!!!."

Then everything went pink.

"Hey Katie!" my best friend said.

"Hey Macy!" I said.

Everyone thinks that we are unpopular, because we are pretty, and like, wear, like makeup. Like, I know right? LOLOLOLOL

"We are sooooooooooooooo ABNEUUARCPSAAD!!!" she said.

Suddenly, a monster came and swallowed Macy. Then I saw this Blue eyed. eyed kid pull out this glowy swordy thingy and like, stabbed it.

"Hi, I'm Precy Jaksonn," he said. Then he hugged me.

Then he said, "YOU, KATIE SALLY MACY JANE MAKEUP MASCARA FACE, ARE THE CHILD OF POSEIDON AND APHRODITE, AND HAVE BEEN BLESSED BY ALL THE GODS." and a bunch of shiny things surrounded me me.

Then I flew on my private unicorn to Camp Half-Blood.

"Watch out, I have a blonde girlfriend that I hate." he said.

So, as soon as I came into Camp I smacked the blond fool.

"Thats Jasooon," Percy said.

So I slapped the other one.

"Thats Willy Solnotace."

So I slapped the third one.

"Thats Pippy Longstocking Mcdirty." he said.

Then I made out with the last one.

"Thats Leooy Vaaldoez and Niko Didevelo" he said.

So, then the Annabelle girl kissed Percy, who obviously wasn't enjoying it.

She said, "Welcome to Camp! I hope you do well here, we want you to succede!" and smiled evillly, so I shoved her to the ground.

Then this red head girl made green smoke come out of herself. Ewwww!! LOL Who caresss?

Y'all are going to Wendy's

To eat McDonalds

And 2 randos will be eaten by some dragon

And then you'll fight a jerk and a cyclops

While your in a boat

Thats it for today make sure to like and subscribe

She said, while she spun around and jumped like a ballet dancer thingy.

Then everything went pink with purple stripes.

"Bye everyone," I said, while the campers threw roses and chocolates at me.

"You can't come," Annabelle said. "You literally came to camp 10 minutes ago. You haven't been claimed. You should stay here, and train hard, and soon you'll become a good demigod,"

Then a Wave washing a dove appeared over my head.

"O.K, whatever." Annabelle muttered, blondly and evlly, throwing her hair, and looking at me with her eyes. She is a redhead, and green eyes aren't even in style.

Then me, the seven, and Nico, Thalia, Harry Potter, Barry Allen, Bruce Wayne, Tony Stark, Zoe Nightshade, The Flash, Aquaman, Bianca DiAngelo, and some more people got on the boat to eat McDonalds at Wendys.

Then a dragon came inside and only ate Pippery and Jasonon

Then they left and I thought, Better them then me.

Then JaAson came up to me and flew us to Wendys.

Then, Nikko started eating a big mac and Piper slapped it into a boat.

"GO GET IT," he said.

So we all went into the boat and then Macy flew on a cyclops and jumped off, while doing a flip.

"FIGHT ME," she said.

"O.K," I said.

Then I picked up my rainbow sword, jumped on Jason, and said "GIDDYUP HORSEY" and he flew and then I smacked Macy and she crumbled into dust. Then some guy with OMEGA TRIDENT HURRICANE WARRIOR on their shirtcame. Then he took off his mask and said."I, PERCY JACKSON, AM HURRICANE TRIDENT COOOL OCEAN DUDE." and we made out.

Then Annabeth said, "Whatever," and we lived happily ever after.

Then I smacked her in the face and used my cool awesome powers to blow her up and make her ugly.

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Okay, let's just break down Katie's personality and its cliches first, because if I try to take in all of the horribleness at once, my brain will explode.

Katie constantly belittles herself. This is what happens when authors try to make a character an underdog, yet powerful. This worked in Percy Jackson's case because he actually was an underdog, who had no clue what was happening most of the time, and never really mastered his powers.

Can I just remind you guys that not every demigod has an abusive stepmom/dad? There are parents who support their children, who actually love them. The mortal parent is always either dead, abandoned their child, or has an evil stepparent replacement. Sometimes all three!

When used right, it can really add to the plot. But when used incorrectly, it often makes your character seem cliche, or a sob story. Yes, I know, these things happen in real life. Parents break up, abandon their children, and do other horrible things. But we can't keep relying on the crutch that it will be relatable to some kid whose reading.

There was literally no description. Pretty much "Percy killed the monster." I cringe when I see that in books. Most of the time, they'll mention the name of the monster, but won't include details on how it was killed. Did he tear it apart with his bear hands, barely come out alive, destroy it with Riptide? How are we supposed to know.

Come on, you're basically announcing "HA, MY OC IS THE MOST POWERFUL DEMIGOD TO WALK THE EARTH, HA!" You're creating a Gary/Mary Sue.

For those of you who aren't familiar with the term, Mary Sue refers to a completely perfect character. Examples can be a blonde haired, pink sparkle eyed, beautiful, powerful, smart, yet oblivious to relationships, with amazing fashion sense. They can differ to more realistic models, yet the fundamentals are the same. If you're wondering if you're character is a Mary Sue, there are several tests you can take online.

Grammar and spelling are often huge problems. You don't have to be perfect, jtus trry andd eidt thhe hgue mstikaes. U dnt want txting tlk in ur stry eithr. AND THE NAMES. The most common butchering of a name that I've observed is Nico's. It is Nico di Angelo. Please, get it right.

Prophecies almost never make sense until they are lived out. They are almost never as specific as

 "Venture forth, Ethan Chase-Jackson, Alina Chase-Jackson, and other children of the seven. Go and reclaim the lightning bolt, and you all will survive. A war is looming on the horizon, and only the children of heroes past can win it."

I mean, look at The First Great Prophecy compared to this one. Does that one even make sense? Is it spoken in riddles? And the continuity. If you guys remember, I added an idiotic plot twist where a dead character survived, and Jason and Piper also miraculously lived. Please, have some continuity!

That has been this chapter of PCD. Next up: Demigods React to "That One Cliche OC Story With The Bad Title"