《A Journey towards Her.. [COMPLETED]》Feedback
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As you all know, we came to the end of this ss. Though it is a short one and contains only a few parts, I would like to know your feedback about this story. This is the first story that I have completed successfully. So please answer a few questions, so that I can improve myself more.
1. Who is your most favorite character of this ss?
2. Which is your favorite scene of this ss?
3. Which is your favorite chapter of this ss?
4. If you were given a chance to play any role in this story, which character would you choose?
5. Name any one annoying character of this story, according to you.
6. If you can, which scene of this story would you like to change and how?
7. Which is your favorite, an emotional heart wrenching story or a simple light hearted one?
8. Where do you want me to improve myself as a writer?
9. Are you comfortable with my style of writing?
10. Rate this book on the scale of 1 to 10.
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