《Write Better: Tips and tricks》Little did he know....[aka spoilers]
Advertisement
A common piece of advice for writers is: don't tell the reader what's going to happen before it happens. The "little did he know, but his life was about to change forever."
A lot of people think they're doing a fine job of avoiding this. Most of the time, you aren't literally writing "little did I know" but then sometimes you forget about the small stuff. This is really easy to do, but it's also really easy to recognize and correct.
Yesterday I was reading a published novel from a small but successful writer with multiple 4&5 star selling titles to their name. They have a unique series that I enjoy reading very much. It's not my favorite, not a masterpiece, and won't be winning any awards, but to me it's a fun read, and as a reader, that's all that matters.
And about two-thirds of the way through this particular story, the writer had established a scene (one I've changed because I don't want to bad mouth them; I like them and admire their success!).
[names, characters, situations have all been changed]
In our scene, detectives Frank and Beans have hidden themselves somewhere in the spaghetti warehouse, where a deal involving Mayor Mac and the feared Elbow cartel is going down. They've got to get pictures of the Mayor to prove his involvement. The scene is tense. Frank, against Bean's wishes, sneaks closer and covertly snaps a few last-second shots.
Going forward proved to be Frank's downfall.
For the next three paragraphs, I found myself sitting there waiting for the downfall. I wasn't tense, didn't wonder what would happen next or if Frank might get spotted. I changed gears. Instead of following every line closely, creeping forward with Frank, I was just looking for the thing that was going to cause trouble. The marvelous, tense little details didn't matter quite as anymore.
Advertisement
Because I knew Frank was going down. Maybe not how, but I was reading for what caused Frank's downfall instead of reading with Frank.
Instead of going: Oh no! Frank! I was watching it like a bad horror movie. I'm still interested in what happens, and a good writer/director can have you on the edge of your seat, but I know where it's going. Like when the teenage girl knows there's a killer in the house and she walks into the back bedroom in the dark to investigate a noise.
Well, yes. If you do it right, you can use this sort of information to propel the story, or change the focus. You can ramp up tension in new ways The problem I often see is that writers aren't always doing it intentionally. The line "Going forward proved to be Frank's downfall" sounds dramatic and promising so they use it and viola!
So when you find yourself using a spoiler line, think about what it is you're trying to accomplish in the scene. Ask yourself if it's worth spoiling or if your readers will get a better reaction going in blind.
You're nine. Your mom is having a conversation with the school teacher about your behavior lately. You hid the class tarantula in your desk.
What is this scene like if the reader *knows* about the tarantula? What is the scene like if they react 'in real time'? There are perks and negatives to both methods. Just make sure you're using something intentionally.
Advertisement
- In Serial440 Chapters
The Beginning After The End
King Grey has unrivaled strength, wealth, and prestige in a world governed by martial ability. However, solitude lingers closely behind those with great power. Beneath the glamorous exterior of a powerful king lurks the shell of man, devoid of purpose and will.Reincarnated into a new world filled with magic and monsters, the king has a second chance to relive his life. Correcting the mistakes of his past will not be his only challenge, however. Underneath the peace and prosperity of the new world is an undercurrent threatening to destroy everything he has worked for, questioning his role and reason for being born again.
8 1125 - In Serial41 Chapters
Beach Bum
This is a fun little swashbuckling Isekai story. The MC isn't some martial arts savant or anything.Instead, he uses his geek knowledge to get by as he adapts to his new reality.
8 188 - In Serial53 Chapters
Gateway
An archaeologist by the name of Søren Quinn wakes up elsewhere after boarding a plane for Iceland. Now he has to come to terms with a significant loss of recent memory and his apparent death and rebirth, provided he can survive the rigors of the Tutorial on Gateway Station and whatever waits for him after the Tutorial. Updates. When I can... sorry. Author's Note. Gateway is a portal/isekai style GameLit novel, but it has two main lead characters and will eventually have a small cast of minor lead characters to support them. There will be small elements of base building / kingdom management added as well over time, but they will not be the focus. Gateway really is a slow burn that takes some time to get going unfortunately, but I hope you find it's worth the wait. Thank you! p.s. Book One is finally done (only needed one more chapter unfortunately...) but I'm off hiatus now and will be starting on Book Two right away!
8 132 - In Serial27 Chapters
The Dragons Predicament
Monsters, humans, war. Within their shielded cities of Technomagi, the humans live their lives in small boxes. Only venturing out of their bubbles with gunslingers or mages trained to defend against the beasts outside. Teleportation to other cities is normal, done through square boxes on rails that are housed underground. These days, the disparity between humans and us has grown to a breaking point. In a single night: an entire nation of monsters vanished. A cloud and flash of light that all had seen. Only the strongest could survive against their might and stubborn ingenuity. Those terrifying, amazing humans. We had laughed at first. ‘What possible danger is there? They’re just humans’. That was centuries ago by this point, of course. We all realized the moment we saw that metal tube fall. There is something that only a human can accomplish, through their ability to see light even in the darkest situation. You don’t win against humans. You either die with them or live to serve them.
8 377 - In Serial8 Chapters
WELSH MAGIC
A barely literate pyromancer struggles to avoid expulsion from the prestigious Crymych School of Druidic Sorcery; but when a murderer begins hunting her more talented classmates, exams become the least of her worries. (Especially when her friends are the next to go missing.) A Mythological Whodunnit. (completed)
8 170 - In Serial26 Chapters
A Stupid Hot Head-Natsu Dragneel fanfiction
Lucy Heartfillia is the type of girl that people don't notice. She likes it that way. She had her friends and didn't get unwanted attention. But one day when the playboy jock, Natsu Dragneel, makes a bet with her. She doesn't pay much attention to it but Natsu makes sure she does. He starts to hang around her like crazy. What happens when Lucy finds out Natsu might not be all bad?
8 93

