Here are a collection of short tales inspired from lives of common people.

Dumbledore once said, "It takes great deal of bravery to stand up to our enemies. But just as much as to stand up to our friends."

So, in these stories you will find people standing up to someone they love, starting new friendships, letting go old relationships, and most of all living their life to the fullest.

Story#1

"How much mark did you score in finals?" Or "I saw you talking to that guy... Is he your boyfriend?"

Remember this?

Remember those nosy aunties who used to interfere with our lives? While 90% of them were trying to dig up some gossip, some had good intentions. Delve in and decide whether this aunt has an intention or is just trying to be nosy!

Story#2

"You are a girl. You can't do this" OR "You shouldn't do that"

How many of you heard this saying while growing up? Fortunately, some of us didn't. But, others were not so lucky. They had to prove others at each and every step that they are capable of living independently.

Similarly, will Naina be able to prove that she is capable of handling herself. Or will her fate be like millions out there?

I was able to clearly see the title and author's name, and the cover accurately represents your story collection. It looks professionally made and draws me in as a reader. So well done!

Like your cover, your title represents your story collection. It lets potential readers know that this is a collection of stories, not just one story. It's unique, quirky, and has a nice ring to it for me to remember. A solid 10/10!

I was skeptical with the length of your blurb. There was a lot you could shorten and tighten. Remember that potential readers will probably only skim the first few sentences of your blurb, and if they aren't interested, they'll leave without reading the entire blurb completely. You also had an overwhelmingly large amount of grammatical errors. You confused several filler words, left out necessary definite/indefinite articles, and confused your punctuation marks (or left them out). You confused comma rules and had many tense slip-ups as well. If I were to shorten and grammatically correct your blurb, it would look something like this:

Dumbledore once said, "It takes a great deal of bravery to stand up to our enemies, but just as much as to stand up to our friends."

In these stories, you will find people standing up to someone they love, starting new friendships, letting go old relationships, and most of all, living their life to the fullest.

"What marks did you score in the finals?" Or, "I saw you talking to that guy... Is he your boyfriend?"

Remember those nosy aunties who used to interfere with our lives? While 90% of them were trying to dig up some gossip, some had good intentions. Delve in and decide whether this aunt has good intentions or is just being nosy!

"You are a girl. You can't do this." Or, "You shouldn't do that."

How many of you heard this saying while growing up? Fortunately, some of us didn't. But others were not so lucky. They had to prove to others at each and every step that they were capable of living independently.

Will one girl prove that she's capable of handling herself? Or will her fate be like millions out there?

I appreciated how you introduced an interest of your main character right off the bat. I got right into her mindset, the current mood of the beginning of the story, and how she felt in that moment. I still found a few grammatical errors and suggestions to nitpick at, and I'll explain them later in your chapter review.

You had the occasional slip up with your punctuation/capitalization regarding your dialogue. Your dialogues are typically accompanied with dialogue tags (she said, he yelled, they shouted, describing the way someone says something), and action tags (she grinned/he sighed/they walked away, basically an action). A dialogue tag is a continuation of a dialogue sentence, meaning that the dialogue itself should end in any punctuation but a period, and the beginning of the dialogue tag is never capitalized, seeing as it's not the beginning of a new sentence. The opposite goes for an action tag, which is a separate sentence. That means the dialogue should end in any punctuation but a comma, and the beginning of the action tag is always capitalized.

Example of dialogue + dialogue tag: "'I'm okay,' she said." OR "She said, 'I'm okay.'"

Example of dialogue + action tag: "'I'm okay.' She forced a smile." OR "She forced a smile. 'I'm okay.'"

You also had some comma mistakes in your writing. Commas are used to separate different clauses. There are two types of clauses: Independent and dependent. They both have subjects (who/what is doing the action), and a predicate (the action being done). The difference between the two is that an independent clause can stand alone as its own sentence, while a dependent clause depends on another clause to make sense. If more than one clause is joined together, they should be separated with a comma. For example, this sentence, "I cried, then Billy ran away," there are two different independent clauses. One is "I cried," and the other is "Billy ran away." You'll notice that they're separated with a conjunction and a comma. You often misuse commas in this sense or forget to add them. Commas can also be used to separate an introductory phrase or word before the main clause. In the sentence, "Today I went to work," the independent clause is "I went to work," and you'll notice that it has a subject "I" and a predicate "went." The word "today" is excluded, and needs to be separated with a comma. The correction is: "Today, I went to work."

You also had some incomplete sentences within your writing, so keep in mind that a sentence should at least be one clause, meaning it should have a subject and a predicate.

You didn't have many typos, but you did confuse filler words or left out necessary filler words. I've included some examples of this mistake in your chapter review.

For the plot ideas you've incorporated here, they were definitely unique. The first chapter in itself was just a chapter for me to enjoy as a reader, rather than something to expect dramatic action with, and you executed this to near perfection. The only problem I had was with your characters. You only have a short space to cram in details about your MCs, seeing as it's a short story collection, but this means that it's just as, if not more, important to establish a bond between the characters and the readers. Since these are short stories, readers might forget about them as soon as they finish reading. You want your characters to stay memorable, their actions to seem reasonable in regards to their personalities, and for them to come to life. I'll address this more in the character section.

As I've mentioned earlier, establishing bonds between your characters and your readers are very important. Even if their roles are small, try to install their physical flaws, quirks, and habits. That way, anything they do will make sense for your readers, because they'll feel that they, on a personal level, connect with your characters, and can understand what they're doing. Everybody should have more than one side, so try to add more depths in the emotions of your characters. With mood swings, try to explain them so your characters can understand. For example, when Nadhi stops crying so her mom wouldn't see, I found the emotional transition too abrupt to be natural. Instead, try to provide some hints that Nadhi was trying to hide her crying, such as sniffling, hiccups, or averted eyes. I couldn't settle with the fact that she was sobbing one second and calmly speaking the second. And her mother, being her mother, would have noticed Nadhi's signs of crying and would have asked what was wrong. Really put yourself into these situations and ask yourself what the rational thing a real-life person would do in these types of situations.

You have a lovely and unique writing voice that I particularly enjoyed in this first chapter. Just by polishing and getting rid of the grammatical errors, your writing voice will improve drastically. Once you implant consistencies with the quality of your writing, you can then continue on to experiment with your writing style. What makes your writing style different from others (in a good way)? Try to bring these qualities to light and make them stand out. That way, you can draw in readers who connect with your style of writing. You can also add in descriptions, metaphors/similes, and sensory detail to bring your writing to life.

For the most part, your writing was smooth, and your transitions were natural. I found some repetition with how you transitioned, and there were some awkward parts where you dragged on one part more than necessary, as though struggling with what to write next. By practicing/writing every day, this skill will automatically begin to improve on its own, but I also encourage you to take a look at the transitions or the story flow other authors use, see what you like about it, and try to capture that same feeling in your writing (in a different way, of course).

In paragraph 1, I suggest writing out numbers. You look more professional as a writer that way, and it doesn't break the flow of the story for your writers. "12:30 am" can be written as "twelve-thirty AM." This applies to the rest of your chapter when writing numbers. Notice that I capitalized "AM," as it's not a word, but an acronym for the Latin word, ante merīdiem.

"So, after passing 10th she had nothing in mind..." (p.2). You have a misplaced comma here. Additionally, tenth what? Tenth grade? Ten years old? Correction: "So after passing tenth grade [/year], she had nothing in mind..." Notice how I wrote out the word "tenth."

In paragraph 3, "quarantine" should not be capitalized.

"Even the sky is in turmoil, she thought dryly..." (p.6). If your character is having a thought, I suggest italicizing it to make that clearer for readers. Suggestion: "Even the sky is in turmoil, she thought dryly..."

"... I'm sorry to disturb your once in a blue moon moment..." (p.9). "To" should be "for," and you need hyphens here. Correction: "... I'm sorry for disturbing your once-in-a-blue-moon moment..."

In paragraph 11, you suddenly started head-hopping into Nadhi's brother's head. This is not a skill that less-than-advanced writers should attempt, as it can misfire for confused readers. I strongly suggest against using this technique. Remember that you are writing in Nadhi's POV, and she cannot possibly know her brother's thoughts. You use this technique several times throughout the chapter, so I suggest converting those into Nadhi's thoughts instead of his.

"Meanwhile Nidhi flopped down upon her bed." (p.21). You need a comma here. The main clause is "Nidhi flopped down upon her bed," and has the subject "Nidhi" and the predicate "flopped." You'll notice that "meanwhile" isn't included in the clause, and therefore should be separated with a comma. Correction: "Meanwhile, Nidhi flopped down upon her bed."

"'Nidhi, I am so sorry,' Her mother began..." (p.31). This should be one sentence. You ended the dialogue with a comma, indicating that the dialogue tag continues the sentence. Therefore, "her" is not the start of a new sentence, and should not be capitalized. Correction: "'Nidhi, I am so sorry,' her mother began..."

"Dressed up in a heavy red Indian saree and a lot of jewelry." (p.37). This sentence is technically incomplete. A sentence needs to have a subject and a predicate. In this case, you have a predicate/action with the word "dressed," but you don't have a subject: who is dressed. I suggest combining this sentence with the one prior.

"As if, behaving sweet is going to solve everything, Nidhi thought mentally scoffing." (p.39). You're missing commas, you have unnecessary commas, and I suggest italicizing thoughts. Correction/Suggestion: "As if behaving sweet is going to solve everything, Nidhi thought, mentally scoffing."

"Her mother signaled Rajat to apologize immediately." (p.48). You're missing a necessary filler word in this sentence. Correction: "Her mother signaled for Rajat to apologize immediately."

"'Um, yes,' Her brother replied after a pregnant pause..." (p.58). This is one sentence, and the beginning of the dialogue tag shouldn't be capitalized, as it's not the beginning of a new sentence. Correction: "'Um, yes,' her brother replied after a pregnant pause..."

I enjoyed the concepts you incorporated into the story collection! You took small ideas and made them interesting for your audience. There were still grammatical errors and confusions with your sentence structuring, so I suggest focusing on thoroughly editing before considering your descriptions.