'It's Coming to an End' is a short story intentionally enveloping the reader in the exact moment that we all fear. When promises of 'forever' have now been realized to be lies; that there is no promised future together. That it's the end.

'She knew it was coming to an end when they didn't know what else to say. Embarking the inevitable finality of 'us' was the unaccustomed tension, silence, complaisance.'

The cover was neat, organized, and creative. I enjoyed how the title incorporated the colors of the image, and the image used represented your story and hinted at the potential surroundings of your characters. The author's name is hardly there, however, so I suggest making it bolder or placing it somewhere easier to see.

The title definitely hints at your story genre and plot. It's unique, interesting, and pulls me in. Your blurb referenced it, and it feels like the right fit for your story. Well done!

While I appreciate the conciseness and shortness of your blurb, I would have liked a direct description of your story. From your characters, the setting, and the overarching question, these all could have hinted at what your story was directly about. Instead of directly addressing the potential readers, talk about your character and the plot idea instead. A blurb is basically opening a small window to the contents of your story, and you only have a small space to hook in new readers.

From the first sentence, I was able to detect your writing capabilities and feel myself in your character's surroundings. You did more of listing descriptions rather than linking them all together and described the same thing several times. For readers simply looking for something to enjoy consuming, this can push them away. How can you spice up your hook more? How can you dramatize the moment without listing descriptions for the same things? Try to lend that same courtesy to other things in the character's surroundings.

You struggled with your punctuation and capitalization with dialogues. If your dialogue is accompanied with a dialogue tag (he said, she yelled, they shouted, describing the way someone says something), the dialogue tag is a continuation of the dialogue sentence. For example, it makes little sense for the clause, "She said," to be a sentence by itself. Therefore, it's part of the dialogue sentence. The dialogue should end in a comma to show that the sentence isn't complete, and the start of a dialogue tag is not capitalized, as it's not the start of a new sentence. The opposite goes for action tags. If your dialogue is accompanied by an action tag (she grinned/he sighed/they walked away, basically an action), the action should not be part of the dialogue sentence. The dialogue doesn't help the action tag make sense; the action tag should be a sentence by itself. Therefore, the dialogue should end in a period to signify the end of the sentence, and the start of the action tag should always be capitalized, as it's the start of a new sentence. Of course, the punctuation may vary. Exclamation marks and question marks can end a dialogue regardless of the tag accompanying it, as long as if it's a dialogue tag, the dialogue never ends in a period, and for an action tag, it never ends in a comma.

Example of dialogue + dialogue tag: "'I'm okay,' she said." OR "She said, 'I'm okay.'"

Example of dialogue + action tag: "'I'm okay.' She forced a smile." OR "She forced a smile. 'I'm okay.'"

I also found one or two tense slip-ups. Whether your story is set in past or present tense, you need to pick one and stay in it. If you're in past tense, use words such as "didn't" and "wanted." If you're writing in present tense, use, "don't" and "want." I've shown a few examples where you slipped up your tense below, so keep this rule in mind for future writing.

I was impressed by the cleanliness of your writing! You had no typos or awkward filler words cluttering your writing. Your vocabulary was impressed, and I was continuously fascinated with your diction choices.

I got the sense that your story had less to do with what was going on, more with the idea that something was over. There was contemplative thinking, and this short story got me thinking about the concepts you've incorporated. It was less of a story from beginning to end; more of a story starting from the beginning of an end. It was stimulating, compelling, and interesting. I did get the sense that you focused more on the rigid structure of your writing rather than the artistic side, so the emotions you tried to portray came out forced and didn't invoke feelings within me as a reader. I suggest focusing on those areas. Forget about being grammatically accurate or your writing structures. Write from the heart, and you can edit it all later. Your readers will know when you're being genuine and really interacting with your own writing.

I got a very hazy sense of your characters, as though they were blurry silhouettes with no names or descriptions. I feel that this fit very well with your story, and a theory that I had while reading this was that this could be because these two people could be anybody; they were everybody and nobody at the same time. No matter the reason, I appreciated the mysterious yet authentic aura I received from them. Well done!

Your writing style is very distinct and had me reading with awe. You have advanced writing skills, and I was thrilled with the quality I received. I found that there was some purple prose here and there, but not overly obnoxious enough to be a problem. They added to your storytelling and added to the intrigue of your story.

The way you wrote had me feeling like there was no time in your story, and this, to me, was a good thing. The limited time they spent together felt endless to me as the reader, and there was not a moment where I felt that transitions dragged on. Not to mention that this story is only one scene, so it's hard to mess up the story flow for that in the first place. Well done!

"Under that shedding tree, they stood in silence." (p.2). You have repetition here. In the first paragraph, you wrote, "Under the incandescent altar, they stood. Silently." This is almost the same thing, not to mention the similar sentence structure. I suggest avoiding this repetition.

"... a reference to each flowing vein splayed out on the decrepit leaves surface." (p.2). You need an apostrophe here, as "leaves" is possessive. Correction: "... a reference to each flowing vein splayed out on the decrepit leaves' surface."

"Just Silence." (p.3). You capitalized "silence" here where it shouldn't be capitalized. Unless it was intentional; I'd love to know!

"Still, he says nothing." (p.4). For the first half of this story, you wrote in past tense. However, you slipped up and wrote in present tense here. Correction: "Still, he said nothing."

"'Well?' She attempted in hopes of comforting the nausea ensuing in her stomach." (p.6). Here, you unnecessarily capitalized the word "she." It isn't the start of a new sentence, as this is a dialogue tag accompanying the dialogue. You also need a comma here. Correction: "'Well?' she attempted, in hopes of comforting the nausea ensuing in her stomach."

"'I don't know.' He mustered up pathetically." (p.9). This should be one whole sentence. Since the dialogue tag is an accompaniment to the dialogue, the dialogue should end in a comma (to signify that the sentence continues), and the beginning of the dialogue tag shouldn't be capitalized. Correction: "'I don't know,' he mustered up pathetically."

You have exceptional writing talent, and you tied up the ending to connect with the title. The ending in itself was beautiful and breathtaking; very satisfying to read! There were a few minor grammatical errors that I've pointed out, but otherwise, there was nothing for me to nitpick at!