She wanted to escape, she found her escape

It doesn't look like a lot of time has been put into the title presentation, font, sizing, and color. The photo manipulation isn't the best, and overall the cover doesn't look professional. I wasn't drawn in to your story, so I suggest getting another cover from a Wattpad cover designer.

The title here sounds like you put together two words that are relevant to your story. But they don't have a nice ring to it, and the title is generic. There are so many stories related to time and escaping, you need to narrow your title down to draw in an audience genuinely interested. As you write, consider opening yourself to new title ideas. They may come to you in a certain phrase, object, or concept in the story.

The blurb here is too vague to draw me in. The point of the blurb is to show off your writing capabilities while exposing the plot of your story to potential readers. There are so many books out there with a similar concept to yours, and I didn't get enough information to want to read your story. The sentence is unfinished as well (missing period) and I didn't get a character's name, the setting, scene, situation, and trigger. It's vital to include these, or you'll have a hard time finding a strong audience.

I spotted some awkward sentences that could be restructured to sound more poetic in your writing, but I did enjoy how you started off the foreword. You made the first paragraph sound dreamy and aesthetic, and I enjoyed it immensely!

It was hard to untangle some of your sentences, because you had a variety of grammar mistakes ranging from commas, punctuation, and misusing plural/singular transition words. Keep in mind to keep your plural/singular words consistent when writing. That means that when you write about her eyes, you should use the word "were" rather than "was," as "her eyes" is plural, meaning more than one. Along with that, keep in mind that a comma should be separating several topics within a sentence. However, the rules for commas are always complex, so I suggest doing more research of this on your own and using a helpful writing tool to help find your mistakes.

While I didn't spot any typos within your foreword, there were several times I spotted misused words, or there was a repetition of words in your writing. I've pointed them down below, but hopefully you'll be able to find the rest on your own. I strongly suggest proof-reading/editing your writing thoroughly before uploading on Wattpad, as I've found too many mistakes to point out each and every one of them.

There are many stories out there where the protagonist just wants to escape from the reality of life. Your story is the same, and I couldn't find something that differentiated it from other stories. Your plot is too vague, and from reading your foreword/synopsis, all I learned was that she was tired of life, she used poetry as her escape, and had conflicted feelings when love entered her life. Try to go more into detail about what her plan was for her escape, and who was the love interest? While I appreciated the philosophical thinking, you spent too much time describing her feelings for poetry and life overall. Try to stay on track without rambling about topics unnecessary to the synopsis.

I wasn't able to catch a strong glimpse of your protagonist through your synopsis, but I appreciated that I was able to gather what type of person she was. Even so, her personality/thinking didn't leave a strong mark on me. How can you strengthen your foreword to leave an immediately lasting mark on potential readers and keep them reading? The traits that I've discovered about Rain are generic and qualities I can see in many other characters from other stories. How is your character different, and what quirks does she have that other people don't?

I enjoyed the lovely descriptions you've provided, and the metaphors/similes you provided painted a strong visual in my head. Your writing was very dreamy, and I got a strong glimpse at your writing style. However, it was hard to appreciate your writing voice, as the amount of grammar mistakes I've spotted got in the way of looking at smooth writing. I suggest cleaning up your mistakes and strengthening your vocabulary. You have a lot of potential in this area!

I enjoyed how you transitioned from one paragraph to another. You gradually lead me to the main plot, and I got the idea of your story plot when I was finished reading your synopsis. However, the transitions were too gradual. It seemed like you were stuck in one area too long (for example, her mindset when she's writing) and there were a lot of sentences that were repeating the same message; simply written differently. You could shorten/tighten it a lot better and have faster transitions.

"She is Rain Alexa Davis." (p.1). So you ended your first paragraph with this sentence, and it sticks out sorely. It doesn't fit in, and it's unnecessary. I suggest removing this entire sentence and instead start your next paragraph with her full name. Your readers will understand that "one girl" is Rain.

"Rain tried to escaped the reality of life and that was one of the greatest shot she could ever had." (p.2). Right off, I spotted several grammar errors. You have trouble with correctly conjugating words in a sentence. You're also missing a comma here. Correction: "Rain tried to escape the reality of life, and that was one of the greatest shots she could ever have."

"Not literally means that she escape is she go somewhere far from her home but she escaped through words and her pen." (p.2). You don't need to elaborate how Rain escaped the reality of life, because from reading your first sentence, I already know what you mean. This sentence is also written in broken English, missing many vital conjugation. I suggest you remove this sentence in its entirety, as it's unnecessary and inaccurate.

"It just happen that she discovered her passion on writing poetries. One day as she wake up her eyes was burning in the passion of writing a poetry." (p.3). You've incorrectly conjugated many words here, and "was" should be replaced by "were" since "her eyes" is plural, not singular. Along with that, the singular version of "poetry" is "poem," as it appears you didn't know that. Correction: "It just happened that she discovered her passion for writing poetry. One day when she woke up, her eyes were burning with the passion of writing a poem." Along with that, did you notice your repetition of the word "passion"?

"She always said to herself 'make some magic, go create magic' and when she said magic, she meant poetry." (p.3). You're missing proper punctuation before and after the dialogue, and you need capitalization here. Correction: "She always said to herself, 'Make some magic, go create magic,' and when she said magic, she meant poetry."

"Everytime she starts to write her mind is set on the words "TIME TO ESCAPE'." (p.3). "Every time" should be two words, and you're missing proper punctuation before the dialogue. Along with that, the period at the end should be included in the dialogue, not outside of it. You forget to add a comma between the two clauses, and you also have a tense slip-up. You need to choose whether to write in past or present tense. As you started your foreword with present tense, I suggest you stick with that. Correction: "Every time she starts to write, her mind is set on the words, "TIME TO ESCAPE.'"

"Her words are her spell to poison her own mind to forget the reality even just for a while." (p.3). You're missing several commas here. Correction: "Her words are her spell to poison her own mind; to forget the reality, even just for a while."

I've noticed that you have a repetition of grammar mistakes in your foreword. I've only pointed out a few, and I suggest doing extensive research on grammar independently. I enjoyed the descriptive language you've provided and the deep thinking you incorporated into your writing!