Archer's plan is simple, really.

Find the deadliest pirate ship in the sea, the one that cons its prey in the dark of night with a deathly black exterior and blood red sails. Trick the charismatic Captain and his cunning associate into bringing him aboard. Play the role of a merciless pirate while he rides the ship straight to the most dangerous island in existence. Find his parents. Kill the King.

Maybe it's not simple. Maybe It's insane and ludicrous and far-fetched, but it's also unknown, and, well...

There's adventure in the uncertainty.

I like the uniqueness of the cover, and the way the photo is presented seems to hold a symbolic meaning. The way the title and author's name is presented is also pleasing to the eye, and it looks very professional here! It doesn't hold the spark that I like to see in covers; it doesn't make me stare at it longer than other covers. How can you make your cover stand out from others and make it eye-catching? You can keep it as it is, but I suggest looking for other covers as options from graphic designers on Wattpad.

While I can definitely see the meaning behind the title, I'd like to point out that so many books have protagonists venture into unknown territories, so this title is vague and generic. Try to narrow it down to attract the right audience for your story, not just something widely known in adventure stories. Along with that, your title doesn't have the best ring to it. You can keep it as it is, but I'd recommend finding a more pleasing title, whether it be a significant name in the story, a symbolic object, or meaningful phrase.

I enjoyed the way you presented your blurb and ended it with a note of finality. You stayed with your topic and explained the main goal, character, and setting of your story. There were a few errors, such as the capitalization of the word "It's." Keep in mind that it doesn't need to be capitalized.

I love how you presented your writing capabilities right from the first sentence. That way, you could show your audience what your storytelling would look like, as well as informing them of the character, scene, and setting. The little similes and metaphors added in only enhanced the reading experience.

The biggest problem I found were your commas. Keep in mind that commas are for separating different topics within a sentence. For example, take this sentence: "He gasped as he fell, tripping over the shoes, that were in the hallway." There's an extra comma here; can you find it? The reasoning here is that the clause "that were in the hallway" is incomplete; it can't be a sentence or a topic by itself. In fact, it's part of the topic/clause, "tripping over the shoes." The comma shouldn't be separating it. The correction would be: "He gasped as he fell, tripping over the shoes that were in the hallway." I found that you often broke up your sentences into incomplete commas, though there were also times where you missed a comma or two as well. Keep this rule in mind for future writing, and I suggest combing through your chapters thoroughly; as I've only pointed out a few of these mistakes.

I also found that you confused the punctuation following your dialogue. If you add a dialogue tag after the dialogue (such as "he said," or "she exclaimed," or "they yelled,") it's not a sentence by itself; it's a continuation of the dialogue sentence. That means the dialogue ends in a comma, and the dialogue tag is never capitalized (as it's not the start of a sentence). You already have this part down, but this brings me to my next point. If you add an action tag after the dialogue ("she cried," or "he grinned," or "they ran away," basically just an action), it's a sentence by itself, not a continuation of the dialogue. That means the dialogue should end in a period, and the start of the action should be capitalized; as it's the start of a new sentence. A correct example of this is: "'You wish.' She grinned." Can you see how these are two separate sentences? In summary, if there's an action tag after the dialogue, it should always be capitalized, and the end of the dialogue should end in anything except a comma. If a dialogue tag follows the dialogue, it's vice versa (not capitalized, ends in anything except a period).

There are some minor instances where you missed dialogue marks or incorrectly conjugated words in a sentence. Since these were not repetitive and were out of place, it's safe to assume those were merely typos. Even so, I suggest thoroughly proof-reading and editing your chapters. I've pointed out the specific issues in your chapter reviews.

I can definitely see all the hard work you poured into your writing. There were hardly any spelling mistakes I could find. If you don't already, a neat trick to use is if you save your work on a Google/Word Document, you can save your story as a PDF or change the font to a simplistic one (such as Ariel) and reread it. That way, your eyes will trick you into believing you're reading something new, and you can catch more mistakes that way.

This is one of the most original ideas I've come across on Wattpad. This story is definitely set aside from all the tropes and cliches, and popular genres on the platform. I enjoyed the different ideas and concepts you've weaved in, and I got a great visual for each setting/scene in each new chapter. You put a lot of thought into world building, and I was constantly taken by surprise with each new thing happening.

I normally have to remind writers to have a balance between their physical descriptions and character's personalities, but you had a wonderful balance here. Not only did you take the time to physically describe each new character introduced, but you gave them their own distinct voices, and categorized them into different personalities. I also enjoyed how you used unique names, and each new character you've incorporated and introduced to the story had their own purpose and were carefully planned out.

Your writing voice is advanced, clear, and very particular. I eased right into your style of storytelling, and the metaphors/similes you've slyly incorporated throughout your writing definitely helped. I loved that you took the time to describe all the tiny details, but not overly so that your readers were bored. You didn't info-dump, and you knew how to restructure awkward sentences. I took a few points away because there were some grammatical errors that broke the flow of your story and kept me from completely enjoying the storytelling.

Immediately, I noticed the lack of repetitive transition words. You cleverly slipped from one scene to another, already one step ahead from me and your readers. I didn't notice any abrupt starts to new chapters, and you didn't have too many adverbs complicating your transitions. A solid 5/5!

"... as the community continue to bustle and grow." (p.1). You've incorrectly conjugated a word here. Correction: "... as the community continued to bustle and grow."

"There was barely a soul in the Cobalts that respected the king." (p.8). I suggest replacing "that" with "who." Correction: "There was barely a soul in the Cobalts who respected the king."

"'Afternoon, Katy,' Archer waved with his free hand..." (p.11). Since there's an action tag after the dialogue, it's a separate sentence. The comma should be replaced with a period. Correction: "'Afternoon, Katy.' Archer waved with his free hand..."

"He pushed open the door with his foot, drawing in sunlight into the light atmosphere and threw the netted bag of his haul onto the counter." (p.16). You're missing a proper pronoun here, as the sunlight is not throwing the bag onto the counter. Correction: "He pushed open the door with his foot, drawing in sunlight into the light atmosphere as he threw the netted bag of his haul onto the counter."

"Screw the king, alright, Archer thought to himself." (p.32). I suggest you italicize thoughts. Suggestion: "Screw the king, alright, Archer thought to himself."

"That ship changes people, Archer knew." (p.38). You have a tense slip-up here. Correction: "That ship changed people, Archer knew."

"I'm fine, mother." (p.47). Here, the word "mother" should be capitalized.

"They're all sharp, for sure, but she's the champion." (p.77). You have an unnecessary comma here. Correction: "They're all sharp for sure, but she's the champion."

"Avourienne always stopped there once a year, sneaking and stealing as much as possible, just to show they could." (p.97). You're using an unnecessary comma here. Correction: "Avourienne always stopped there once a year, sneaking and stealing as much as possible just to show they could."

Excellent ending to the first chapter. You left me wanting more, and it's clear you know when to stop and start a chapter.

"He was so quiet Archer hadn't even heard him wake and prepare." (p.2). You're missing a comma here. Keep in mind that these are two clauses that need to be separated. Correction: "He was so quiet, Archer hadn't even heard him wake and prepare."

"It'll be hard, and then it'll be over, and you'll have to forget about it." (p.41). You have an unnecessary comma here. Correction: "It'll be hard, and then it'll be over and you'll have to forget about it."

"The only island closer was Chorro, the small hunk of land stationed right before the border of Myria, where sirens and vicious creatures roamed the waters." (p.61). I suggest you replace one comma with a semicolon. Suggestion: "The only island closer was Chorro, the small hunk of land stationed right before the border of Myria; where sirens and vicious creatures roamed the waters."

"... was the crew of the Avourienne, Clothes as black as the hull..." (p.71). Here, "clothes" shouldn't be capitalized, as it isn't the start of a sentence. Correction: "... was the crew of the Avourienne, clothes as black as the hull..."

"He was the type of man that made you want to cower, strong figure draped in black cloth, dark hair almost completely hidden by the monster of a captain's hat perched on his head." (p.1). Here, I suggest you replace "you" with "Archer." Along with that, replace "that" with "who." I suggest you also add filler words. Correction/Suggestion: "He was the type of man who made Archer want to cower, a strong figure draped in black cloth, and dark hair almost completely hidden by the monster of a captain's hat perched on his head."

"Archer figured the one with the blond curls was Skye Miller, a danger rating of seven, from the look of the longknife attached to her belt, and that meant the other was Lyra Tailsley, a danger rating of eight, from the stories he'd been told by Farley." (p.4). You have unnecessary commas here. For example, if you look at the phrase, "from the stories he'd been told by Farley," it's a continuation of a clause; incomplete. It shouldn't be separated with a comma. I suggest also replacing one comma with a semicolon. Correction: "Archer figured the one with the blond curls was Skye Miller, a danger rating of seven from the look of the longknife attached to her belt; and that meant the other was Lyra Tailsley, a danger rating of eight from the stories he'd been told by Farley."

"I'm not sure what to say, captain." (p.11). Here, "captain" should be capitalized since Archer's referring to a specific person. Correction: "I'm not sure what to say, Captain."

"... framing sharp bone structure." (p.14). I suggest you add a subject pronoun here. Correction: "... framing her sharp bone structure."

"Archer guessed it was a display of control, being forced to pay close attention to grasp her words, that, or the world silenced around her to the point where she never needed to raise her voice." (p.24). Here, I suggest you split this into two sentences. Suggestion: "Archer guessed it was a display of control, being forced to pay close attention to grasp her words. That, or the world silenced around her to the point where she never needed to raise her voice."

"... but still lacking any happiness." (p.58). You've described her smile without any happiness several times. Is there a way you can restate this without repetition? For example, you could say, "devoid of genuine humor."

"But for some reason he didn't." (p.69). You're missing a comma here. Correction: "But for some reason, he didn't."

"Archer turned so quickly to face her he almost knocked his face into hers." (p.71). While this sentence doesn't need a comma, it's best to stay safe and stay clear for your readers. Suggestion: "Archer turned so quickly to face her, he almost knocked his face into hers."

"One shot, to the forehead, and the one person he'd ever loved was dead instantly." (p.80). You have an unnecessary comma here. Correction: "One shot to the forehead, and the one person he'd ever loved was dead instantly."

"He's a little shy though." (p.2). You're missing a comma here. Correction: "He's a little shy, though."

"When he's not in combat, he's really clumsy, which is weird, because he can be really feisty in a fight." (p.4). You have an unnecessary comma here. Correction: "When he's not in combat, he's really clumsy, which is weird because he can be really feisty in a fight."

"You can find him in his room or the room adjacent, the strategy room, most of the time." (p.9). When breaking your narrative to explain something to the audience or character, I suggest using a hyphen or em dash. Suggestion: "You can find him in his room or the room adjacent—the strategy room—most of the time."

"'Tolva,' The long-haired boy smiled at Denver" (p.21). I noticed that you capitalized the word "The." This is correct, but I'd like you to wonder why you did it. The reason is that "The long-haired boy..." is a sentence by itself, and "The" is capitalized as it's the start of a new sentence. However, by ending the dialogue with a comma, you're indicating that "The long-haired boy..." is a continuation of the sentence. Correction: "'Tolva.' The long-haired boy smiled at Denver"

"He caught sight of Liam Britter, the other strategist, by the barrel of rum closest to the door." (p.3). I suggest replacing the commas with hyphens or em dashes to make this more readable for your audience. Suggestion: "He caught sight of Liam Britter—the other strategist—by the barrel of rum closest to the door."

"Behind Bardarian, was Stilta." (p.11). The comma here is unnecessary. Correction: "Behind Bardarian was Stilta."

"He had guessed she was in her late twenties, but now, in the dim lighting, where her eyes weren't as prominent, and when she stood next to all these men, he realized how young she was." (p.34). You have unnecessary commas here. Correction: "He had guessed she was in her late twenties, but now, in the dim lighting where her eyes weren't as prominent and when she stood next to all these men, he realized how young she was."

"Stilta had been standing, but now she sat across from them, on the low coffee table in front of the couch." (p.38). You have an unnecessary comma here. Correction: "Stilta had been standing, but now she sat across from them on the low coffee table in front of the couch."

"Then she leaned forward on her knees and regarded Archer." (p.41). You're missing a comma here. Correction: "Then, she leaned forward on her knees and regarded Archer."

I have all the pieces, but I don't have the big picture." (p.61). You're missing a dialogue mark at the start of this sentence.

"She grinned like she was excited that she finally had someone who would take a little more effort than usual to run circles around." (p.76). You're missing a comma here. Correction: "She grinned, like she was excited that she finally had someone who would take a little more effort than usual to run circles around."

"...so subtle he wasn't sure he'd seen correctly" (p.82). You're missing proper punctuation after this sentence.

I enjoyed the thorough, in-depth story plot you've woven with your characters! It was thrilling to immerse myself in this story, and I was impressed with your advanced writing style. There were still a little hiccups here and there with your grammar. I can tell this story is going to go far, so keep up the excellent work! (Sorry, I wasn't able to critique your prologue as well with my busy schedule. You can un-dedicate that chapter to me, and I hope this was enough!)

Congratulations! Your book has earned at least ninety points in my review—and therefore will be added to my reading list!