《Critique And Editing Info》Critique: His Tattoos
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His Tattoos
: https://www.wattpad.com/story/116668685-his-tattoos
Couchpotato2022
Badboy, murder, shortstory, love
I'm not really sure how I feel about it. I don't like the red coloring for the title, as well as the picture.
Woah.... That was deep...I'm drawn in...
You've hooked me ...interesting...
To be honest the part about Badger is fuzzy. I'm re thinking what I read and I can only remember what the main character looks like, the tattoo, the tattoo shop, the run down area of town Bear and him are in, and getting into the shed.
OMG YASSS!! This is the type of writing I want to read!!!
OMG my Heart!! But what happened to her? Will you tell later?
I just went back and reread the prologue. I understand the italics and bolds now. OMG.
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Overall I see potential. As you noticed I really like chap 2 and 3. Look over chap 1.
I actually might read on (if I find the time 😭)
Rate from 1-5
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1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2: Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4: Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
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