《Critique And Editing Info》Critique: The Life of Cassander Stoutsworth
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The Life of Cassander Stoutsworth
ILikeCrabs
Fantasy, Drama, Adventure?
Cover needed. {New cover I like because it's original, but not really telling me much}
That was amazing. It has me at my edge of my seat wanting more.
It was amazing, great details and reactions between the characters. There are some things I suggest you fix (I commented them on your book)
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I actually really enjoyed reading this. I do have one question though. Is this in our world, but the past (Historical Fiction) or a different world (Like Lord of the Rings). Also because of the language, you need to switch this to mature. Don't get me wrong I LOVE it. It gives depth to your character. Editing wise I suggest you re read the chapters. I found a few missing words; simple words, in Chapter 2.
Somewhere in this book, I have instructions how to get a cover, but I'm not sure which one. I'll probably make a chapter for it since I suggest new covers a lot. If I have the time I will definitely read on. Keep Writing.
When I read about the Tavern all I could think about was 'Master Of The House'-Les Miserables
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1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2: Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4: Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
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