《Critique And Editing Info》Critique: Playing Pretend
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Playing Pretend
StorybookHorror
General Fiction, Adventure, Romance, Suspense
LOVE IT. Love how it's black and white.
Sweet and straight to the point. States the topic.
Very interesting. I've never read something like this before.
5 💙💙💙💙 💙
This story has TONS of potential. When I have time I'll read more. I can see this becoming the next Netflix series hit.
Rate from 1-5
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1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2:Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4:Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
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The wish trials
The God of reincarnation has brought to many idiots back to life with ridiculous wishes and the high council is sick of it messing up their worlds. So a new God was brought in. One that actually made people earn their new lives. But the actions of this unknown deity cause a boy's life to spiral out of control. After a tragic incident, the boy meets the diety where he requests to be able to fly. To accommodate this desire he allows the Boy to complete his task in the body of a random bird. There's only one problem, this bird cant fly. Follow the voices in the boy's head as he struggles to survive and grow stronger so he can get the life he always wanted. Criticism would be great. I also have heavy dyslexia along with some other metal 'uniqueness' so this whole story is a big F you to it but I am sorry for any and all inevitable mistakes.
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In Serial7 Chapters
Jokes On You
ON INDEFINITE HIATUS-> It's DEAD, Jim. Dropped. Not trying this anymore. Sorry. Our story revolves around a man stuck perpetually in black and blue humor. He also gets his ass kicked around until he's black and blue. However, he must deal with his earthly and unearthly problems in the same way. He must survive. Even if he's a shell of his former self. This storyline originates in Tekton history and builds around the Main Character, who narrates. He is reluctant with the standards of the Otherworldly as his situation can be humorous at the expense of our Narrator. Do not expect to be pleased, but somewhat entertained. *Profanity Warning* Cover is not made by me nor mine.
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In Serial10 Chapters
[Book One] Querencia Quintet [Polarity/Pestilence]
Migrated from: https://www.wattpad.com/story/187324475-querencia-quintet-polarity-pestilence This is my official work and my official username, both on Royal Road and Wattpad. Any reposts of Querencia Quintet are not mine and should be reported straight to myself, all copyright ... rights... are withstanding. Book one in the Querencia Quintet franchise is titled "Polarity/Pestilence" and it starts off with our sarcastic, overpowered protagonist, Charley Dunne, a 17 year old werewolf who has been cordially invited by his Werewolf clan's boss, Markus Fell. The invitation is related to Charley's supernatural academy's graduation party. He is about to move out of his parents' house and attend college. The events prior to his successful passing marks within his last exam, all 17 years of his life, have been leading up to one moment and one moment only; war. The war shall begin when he turns 18, the night of April 2nd, 2017. Whose side(s) will Charley Dunne possibly select as his loyal allies; Fleshflingers (Zombies)? Moonbearers (Werewolves)? Spellcasters (Witches and Wizards)? Bloodsuckers (Vampires)? Or Mortals (Humans)? A few, more than a few, or, miraculously, will he be able to unite all five supernatural Councils (groups) and form an eternal pact that may just last a dozen or so centuries? Find out in the very first instalment of: Querencia Quintet. Quoted from my official Wattpad story's description: "Werewolves. Demons. Angels. Spirits. Vampires. Zombies. Humans -- and the greatest supernatural species of them all; witches. The nine Lords of the Night, the thirteen Lords of the Day, the four Horsemen of the Apocalypse, the god of war, Horus, and the greatest progenitor of the mystical arts, Merlin. These five Councils could form a pact that lasts many lifetimes ... but will their differences and flaws work against them? Do the five magical chambers butt heads, or do they accept their uniqueness and strengths and work together?"
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Two dead men for a bloody coin
Is happiness all you get? Does a life without the opposite exist? No. Never. You must be mistaken to think you can avoid the other side of the spectrum, being only one side of the coin. I'm sure you would think me the monster putting you through this, but you are the fool for believing otherwise.
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('ᴀʀɢᴏs ᴀɴᴅ ᴍʀ ᴘʟᴀɴᴛ') ᵒⁿᵉˢʰᵒᵗˢ!
ᴊᴜsᴛ ʀᴇᴀᴅ ᴘʟᴇᴀsᴇ! ʏᴏᴜ ᴡɪʟʟ ғɪɴᴅ ᴏᴜᴛ :)(ᴘʟᴇᴀsᴇ ᴅᴏɴ'ᴛ ʀᴇᴘᴏsᴛ :] )ⁱ ᵐᵃᵈᵉ ᵗʰⁱˢ ⁿᵒᵗ ʸᵒᵘ <>Lmao- I'm 3th in #weirdcoreBro I'm so tired-
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saiki k chatfic but it's canon and gay | published january 3rd, ENJOY !!
EVERYTHING IS SATIRE. I PROMISE.
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