《Critique And Editing Info》Critique: Trapped In Solitude
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Trapped In Solitude
LK_XOXO
Short Story, Complementary (Real Life)
LOVE IT.
Sweet and straight to the point.
I like it. It's what I'll call a nice and fluffy read.
Oh my... This is more organized then 13 Reasons why..LOVE
5 💙💙💙💙
This story was amazing for a little fluffy read. It's straight to the point with all the points of a story and a nice ending.
Rate from 1-5
💙💙💙💙💙
1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2:Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4:Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
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