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4: Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
Whatever I say is not meant to be mean/rude. This is my honest opinion.
*Genres I won't do: Erotica, BxB (If is mature), GXG (If is mature) (Also books with a lot of cussing)
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*Please don't ask for more than five chapters. I will only do five; if I can get through the five. I'm not saying your writing will be horrible, but someone asked me to do five chapters and well it was tough. If you want more than five, let me reach up to five first. If I can, I will message you. If I can't read past chapter five it will mostly be due to needing MAJOR editing, the genre, I feel uncomfortable, etc. Also, I work so I only can critique once I get home from work.
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