《critique shop》a f t e r w o r d
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it has been a year since i opened this shop and served everyone the best possible critique i could offer. it has been a journey, i learned a lot from this as much as my clients have learned. and now it has come to an end:)
yes, you've read it right. i am ending the journey here. it's about time to close the shop. i won't be accepting any clients anymore. but will i open another critique shop? well, i'm not quite sure. the thought hasn't crossed my mind yet. oh, and i think i've waited enough for the two pending clients. i can't possibly wait forever. so... yeah.
to all of my clients, i hope you learned something from my critiques. goodluck on your journey as a writer. i wish you all the best!
thank you once again for trusting this shop:)
forever thankful,
ethereal_solare
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Lost In Translation
If you're one to travel the roads, you may have heard of me. You may have heard my Names in the stories, the songs, and the whispers of the road. Perhaps you've even seen me during my travels, speaking to a bird of blue light, or on a city street, performing small acts for coin and repute. Or perhaps you may know me as the Skystrider, who walked with the wind. Or the Voiceless, a man of song without speech. You may know me as the Tutor, who taught the Lion of Summer how to fight, or the Traveler, who has walked all the roads of the earth. I am all of these things. And people have branded me a myth. But people don't understand what a myth is. They haven't heard the songs lost to our tongues, nor have they seen the things I've seen. They haven't gone to the places I've gone. My feet have walked the plains, the seas, and the clouds. I have spoken languages unspoken; tongues lost to time. I have sung to the earth, held the moon in my arms, and walked the roads that your heroes hesitate to even mention. I have outwitted Demons. I have danced with the Fae. My songs have been heard by lords of wind and ash, and my steps have echoed in the bellies of gargantuan beasts the likes of which you have never seen. These are what real myths are. And me? I'm no legend. I'm just the bard stupid enough to poke the real ones with a stick. Discord link here. [Disclaimer: Book 1 of this story will likely be published in KU by around the start of 2022, so please keep that in mind. Book 2 and onwards will continue here until they are published as well.]
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A bored boy looking for reason
A boy or a young man looking for a reason. He has come to the conclusion that there is no reason to do anything since there simply is no point in it. While going by his boring normal day as usual reading his novels, he is suddenly enveloped in a white light. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- This is my first story that I write if you don't count school and such. The grammar should not be too bad but English is not my main language so no haters pls.
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Masking Tape
“Well, I do sometimes wonder why we’re sent here, considering we never consented to be born. I’ll just go about living my life, I guess." A supposedly ordinary year in Semangat Junior College proves to be anything but normal for its students when a freshman gets attacked by a mysterious creature prowling around Bishan. That is just the beginning. Unexplainable bursts of magical energy begin mushrooming all over Singapore following the attack. An intern at Divyane is sent on a mission to investigate these strange happenings. Unfortunately for him, nobody told him that the life of an intern was not going to be easy. For one, there is an overly-enthusiastic supernatural fan who insists on following his every mission. Then there is the issue of the rogue mage who has been attacking the school's students and the unresolved disappearances around the island. Will Frankie be able to find the answers to his investigation? Most importantly, who is the rogue mage responsible for the unexplained attacks on regular students? What do they want? The first novel in the planned Rugged Backpack Series, Masking Tape combines elements of the magical girl genre with Southeast Asian mythos through an ensemble cast as they get tangled up in the affairs of a realm they never knew existed beneath their feet. New chapters every Monday and Friday!
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Path
Ancients exist. Gods battle. Relics are treasured. Races with different innate abilities.A world where options aren't bound by fate or destiny. Everyone can twist their road of life as long as they have power.People who have special abilities are called [Anomaly] that can be said to practice the gods techniques and can forge a body alike to the gods.But what do you call someone with abilities that exceeds an [Anomaly] ?Behold the story of Draenol as a being that exceeds an [Anomaly].-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------(I would highly appreciate it if you guys give me some reviews, even if it's not a constructive one or just something like a rant about how I write the story.)--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------I'll be doing chapters around 1k words each now because I think I've finished laying out the foundation of the story. However, if you guys think that it needs more dialogue, I'll be happy to input that. Although I say that, the following chapters that I'll be uploading will be more or less straight to the point to give a faster feeling for the plot. Don't worry though, I'm not going to abandon writing the intricate details, especially the ones that you guys need to know in order to have knowledge of the world that they're in, and the lore that I'm weaving.
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Dungeon Tale
A young man dies, a new core arises. Kyle Branson after a long night of drinking his sorrows away, wakes up in a strange place instead of his bedroom. In a strange body that is not human he tries to make sense of his existence, but also enjoying the trip. With his new powers he posseses he can get almost everything he wants and if can't get it, he will take it. Money is good to have, power to.... but a man's got to do what a man's got to do.
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Restless Night, Pleasant Dreams
I lived my life as a dream. Waking up to attend parties with those of my elk, sleeping with the bright and pretty, leaving behind many promises and lies. I woke up from all of that nonsense. No... it is better to say that I was— shock awake.. I watched my father die like a dog trying to protect my mother. I watch my mother take her own life after my father died. I clearly remember sitting in the steam carriage, nursing a hangover. Praying for this trip to be over. I clearly remember the amber eyes and twelve foot wing span. I clearly remember the sound of iron doors being ripped open as if it was paper wall. I clearly remember other drivers screaming and the sound of collisions and explosions as people rekt in panic of escaping. I remember the death around me and the fear that gripped me. The soul stirring feeling that sent me fleeing while my parents were suck clean of blood. I remember thinking, berating myself hours later. Gripping my hair, slapping my palms into my forehead, questioning why I didn't carry my tools. Weeks pass since that time.. My guilt is gnawing at me and this pain isn't something I like. I almost feel like the man in the mirror isn't me. The me I used to be. Maybe, if I take revenge. I can put these demons to rest? Maybe, if I put these bastard in a grave. I can be someone new? Maybe, after they all die. This mirror won't haunt me with their faces?
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