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Ancient Bones: The Changed Ones book 1 (Post-Post Apocalypse LitRPG)
Is it truly an RPG Apocalypse... if no one can see the RPG? Generations after the Fall, Mankind has achieved a balance in a world it is no longer the master of. But your prospects in this Malthusian world are limited. Johanna Milton and her friends have an answer: delve into Ancient ruins, avoid Changed beasts and mana pockets, and salvage Ancient materials, collectibles, and trinkets to sell. It pays well if you avoid the perils of the Ancient world. But when they find the skeleton of an Ancient, their lives take a strange turn. Suddenly, Talents straight out of fantasy novels become theirs. While they try to make sense of what happens, eyes turn to them, to the four who seem to break all rules. Or are they merely following them? Because, in the Beyond where he's spent 150 years waiting, one dead Ancient knows the truth. Douglas Moore has played those games often enough when he was alive to make sense of the System that rules the Changed world. He can no longer act on his own, but he has access to the Interface. And four people for which he can bring whatever it takes to face the world. Change is coming. The Changed Ones is a slow-burn litrpg fantasy trilogy (Ancient Bones, Ancient Books, Ancient Bonds) set on Earth, 150 years after the RPG Apocalypse... which mostly failed. It is an homage to the venerable ancient RPGs of the Golden Box era, the Baldur's Gates, and many others, offering adventure where You must gather your party before venturing forth. Keywords: LitRPG, realistic setting, low-leveling, post-post-apocalypse, fantasy earth, slow-burn, secondary POVs, female primary MC, team adventure, worldbuilding. Trigger warnings: casual swearing, adult innuendo (no explicit scenes whatsoever, though). Oh, and potentially a bit of politics. Bonus content: a Litrpg Easter Egg hunt. With lots of eggs across the book, some easy, some hard to find. Current score: 6/20 (20 eggs, 6 found) Publication schedule: on hold until September for book 2.
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Prideful Templar - LitRPG
The Trinity Church raised Tilos after The Harbinger’s Blight robbed him of his parents as a child. Gifted with a natural inclination for martial skills, he absorbed the teachings of the Church like a sponge, soaring past his peers. When he passed his Acolyte Ascendancy, Tilos chose to join the Templar Order. Having recently ascended to the rank of Deacon, Tilos joins an expedition to Urith. Determined to help create a settlement-free of the Harbinger and her Blight. Dreaming of a day when the citizens of Ionia can finally thrive once more. But things start to take a turn for the worst when Tilos, Hiro, and Raven cross the border into forbidden lands. He would never know how he let Hiro talk him into stealing from a deity. And with Raven’s Golem failing to keep the diety contained, Tilos is forced into a fight with a goddess. Release Schedule: Everyday at 8 AM (PST)
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NPC (First Draft)
First draft. Read the original! Mwahaha... *cough* 100 characters huh....should be enough now...Nope...NPC has been reuploaded with a Prologue!http://www.royalroadl.com/fiction/928
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That Could Have Gone Better
A standalone tale about a modern student brought through time and space to a land of myth and fantasy. There, an escape attempt is underway and is quickly set upon by the prisoner's keepers. The stakes and tensions run high as the new arrival and the prisoner finish the escape and find themselves traveling through lands unfamiliar to both. Actions have consequences, however, and escape from Adympia is not so easily achieved. Follow the adventures of Amelia and Dexter as the pair flee from the clutches of the Elven empire of Adympia and travel the land beyond. What will they find there? What obstacles will they face? Only time will tell.
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Another Death
"Despair, paranoia, sadness, life has no meaning anymore" are the words of a boy named Andrej who lost all in life and commited suicide, but instead of passing on he awakens in a new world full of wonder, magic, mysteries and adventure. Follow Andrej on his journey as he uses his second chance at life to go on adventures with his friends in a quest to regain his lost happiness and find meaning in life again
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I hate politics
You're a genius alongside Spencer Reid. It was your one year anniversary with the BAU when you got a case in your home town. A little town in no where Connecticut. What happens when you're up one late night, who joins you outside?~~~~~I make a lot of spelling errors so just deal with it. Some parts are based off Gilmore Girls. If you haven't seen it it's fine. My logic doesn't always make sense so don't think to hard about it. Also posted on AO3
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